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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: The Motivation o’ Jody Boy
By Rebecca O'Connor
03/08/08


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“Jody Boy, gee up now ya hear. Liza’s a’ready milked Bertie an’ gots da eggs and poke a fryin’ up. Boy, ya heared me? I says gee up now!”

Marma GG shuffled herself back mumblin’ an’ grumblin’ ta da stove ta stoke da wood fer warmin’ dat small lean-to called home. Wind alays whistled through dem cracks an’ Jody uz snug down in doze feathers not wantin’ ta stir.

“Waza matta GG?” Big Samuel drawled. “Dat der Jody Boy fixin’ ta start ya inta a fussin’ commotion?”

Marma GG wuz alays weidin’ a wood spoon in da air when she’d be talkin’. Mose o’ GG’s talkin’ wuz a yowlin anyways. GG knew how ta holler and pray, an’ sometimes ya couldn’t tell which un she wuz a doin’! She got spirited in ‘em both.

“Dat der boy’s got da sleepin’ fits an’ dat ain’t no lie. Pappy knew hawta cure dem ails, God rest ‘im! He left me mose by mysef ta fix dat un. I says ta Jesus, ‘wat we gonna do bout dat boy?’ I think Jesus don’t know nary a thang ta do ‘ith ‘im neither, but Jesus gonna work it out fer me when he figgers it.”

Jody Boy wuddn’t fast ut nothin’ sept eatin', an’ he could woof it in record time. After breakass, he wuz flat outta da door an’ down at da crick. Dat’d be da last o’ ‘im ‘til da nex meal!

Now, lil did Jody know but wat some female gal ‘ith big brown eyes was a movin’ in ‘ith her auntie close by his lean-to. He spied her on his ways back from dat crick. His stare got stuck on her an’ nothin’ could pull it off doze big brown eyes. He’d never seed da like afore, an’ he be feelin’ kinda funny in da middle o’ hissef. Maybe that be da fits Marma GG uz alays talkin’ ‘bout. He took a big gulp, fer she wuz a comin’ his ways.

“Watch yer name, boiy?”
“I be Jody Bo…uh…Jody. Who be yer name?”
“Oh, I be Milly Rose. I jes got ta my aunties.”

They talked on a ways, an’ jes wen Jody wuz feelin’ at ease he spied Dannel comin’ dow da road. Now, Dannel knowed wat pretty wuz wen he seed it. Jody watched uz Dannel and Milly Rose talked. Dannel wuz a cuttin’ Jody off.

“Milly Rose, ya wanna go froggin’ ‘ith me?” Dannel ax.
“Shore I guess so, but we gots ta be up ut dark afore da rooster,” Milly nodded tord Jody.
“Dats right, Milly. I alays is up afore hearin’ dat ol’ cock crow…I gots chores an’ all,” Jody lied mose easy.

Well, da day flew by, an’ afore Jody knowed it spring wuz on him and luv bloomed in his heart. He wuz up early nex mornin’ an’ da nex…one after t’other protectin’ his claim from Dannel.

Marma GG knowed jes wat happent! Dat der Jesus figgered thangs right off, an’ fixt dat Jody Boy real good. GG beed a prayin’ thanks ever since.

“Jesus, now dat ya gots Jody a movin’, nex thang is a pointin’ him ta some o’ dem chores, an’ I be a happy ol’ woman!” GG smilt up tord heaven, wood spoon in hand and gave Jesus a kindly wink. She’d leave it ta Jesus, cause he’d get it figgered afore too long a time.


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Marilyn Schnepp 03/13/08
It's difficult to critique a foreign language; (*.*)however, a comment might be encouraging to the writer who went to alot of trouble to define something unique. Very Creative!
Christine Dunn03/13/08
An interesting story. I did find it quite hard to follow though. Just a suggestion - Would it be possible to write the spoken words in this dialect, then use everyday English for the narrative?
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/13/08
I agree with Christine Dunn's assessment. The essence of the story idea was very interesting. It was worth working through the dialect to read. I could just see that lazy Jody perk up when romance entered the picture.