The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/08
The most intriguing and exciting read I've had so far today! However, I desperately needed a good ending - an, "And they lived happy ever after" type, if you know what I mean?

Great writing! Immediate luring in of the Reader from the 'get go' - and kept them until the end. Kudos! just need satisfaction that all is well with her husband... Great entry!
03/13/08
NOOO! You left me hanging! OK, I'll just make up my own HAPPY ending. You pulled me right into this one. Great job!
I particularly enjoyed the descriptive details in your story. They pulled me right into the scene you had set. I think to leave it open-ended was just right. That way, the reader is still thinking a long time later about the story and your message of how important it is to mend a quarrel quickly.
03/13/08
Intriguing - Now I want to know what happens next!
A chilling story told in a way that get my attention. Treasure every minute. This could fluff out and expand into a great short story.