The Official Writing Challenge
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The most intriguing and exciting read I've had so far today! However, I desperately needed a good ending - an, "And they lived happy ever after" type, if you know what I mean?

Great writing! Immediate luring in of the Reader from the 'get go' - and kept them until the end. Kudos! just need satisfaction that all is well with her husband... Great entry!
NOOO! You left me hanging! OK, I'll just make up my own HAPPY ending. You pulled me right into this one. Great job!
I particularly enjoyed the descriptive details in your story. They pulled me right into the scene you had set. I think to leave it open-ended was just right. That way, the reader is still thinking a long time later about the story and your message of how important it is to mend a quarrel quickly.
Intriguing - Now I want to know what happens next!
A chilling story told in a way that get my attention. Treasure every minute. This could fluff out and expand into a great short story.