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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: The Romantic Dinner
By Shannah Hogue
03/07/08


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She answered the phone on its second ring, continuing to stir the browning meat as she flipped open her cell.

“Hello?”

“Good evening. I’m looking for Mrs. Marcy Kline?”

“This is she.” Marcy re-covered the pan and set her spatula on the counter.

“Mrs. Kline. This is Officer Olson of the State Highway Patrol.”

Marcy stiffened slightly.

“Is there something wrong, Officer?”

“I’m afraid so, Mrs. Kline. There’s been an accident. Your husband has been taken to South Hospital. Do you know where that is?”

“Yes, I do. Is he okay?”

“The ambulance just left, ma’am. I think you need to get there right away.”

“I see. Thank you for calling me.”

The phone went dead, and she flipped hers closed. For a moment, Marcy merely stood, dazed. The kitchen was a mess, the dinner preparations in full swing. Flour sat like a light snow on the counter. She had three pans in full boil on the stove, and the baking bread filled the kitchen with its yeasty aroma.

The dinner was to be her apology. They’d fought about this trip, about why he had to go, and even when he tried to make it up to her before leaving, she had brushed him off, hoping to make him suffer for a day or two. But she’d regretted it as soon as he drove away. She shouldn’t have let him go like that.

She almost called him to apologize, but decided this surprise would be more romantic. She had waited to make it up to him. And now, now she might have waited too long.

Taking a sharp breath, Marcy suddenly needed to hurry. She turned off the burners and pulled the half-baked bread from the oven. Grabbing her phone and her warmest coat, she picked up her purse on the way to the door. She opened the garage door, took one last look at the remains of the romantic evening she’d planned, and headed to the hospital.


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Marilyn Schnepp 03/13/08
The most intriguing and exciting read I've had so far today! However, I desperately needed a good ending - an, "And they lived happy ever after" type, if you know what I mean?

Great writing! Immediate luring in of the Reader from the 'get go' - and kept them until the end. Kudos! just need satisfaction that all is well with her husband... Great entry!
Mandy White03/13/08
NOOO! You left me hanging! OK, I'll just make up my own HAPPY ending. You pulled me right into this one. Great job!
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/13/08
I particularly enjoyed the descriptive details in your story. They pulled me right into the scene you had set. I think to leave it open-ended was just right. That way, the reader is still thinking a long time later about the story and your message of how important it is to mend a quarrel quickly.
Christine Dunn03/13/08
Intriguing - Now I want to know what happens next!
Liz Hoyt Eberle03/13/08
A chilling story told in a way that get my attention. Treasure every minute. This could fluff out and expand into a great short story.