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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: A Ride for Miss Lilly
By dub W
03/06/08


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Miss Lilly sat in her windowsill
Watching the world go by.
“I can’t leave,” she said voice so shrill
“Well, maybe, someday. Oh me, oh my.”

The ship met the harbor
But Lilly was not to be seen
Just folks meeting relation
“What places they’d been?”

Noisy train rolled down the tracks
A platform filled with lovers waving
Lilly stared through window cracks
“So much fun they are having.”

A stage arrived and all matter
Lilly watched the parade go past
Baggage and hats men did gather
“I really should go,” said Lilly at last.

Lilly sat and watched the road outside
The ponies pranced and played
Dancing children laughed and cried
“Oh, me oh my, I delayed.”

The years went by her window
But never did she explore
Outside to the streets below
Or even dream far away lore.

A tall coachman arrived one day
Just to give Miss Lilly a ride.
“Oh, no I can’t go today.
Not at all,” she cried.

But the tall coachman insisted,
His four black horses neighed
Ready to carry those who resisted
Like Miss Lilly to where she laid.


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Verna Cole Mitchell 03/13/08
You made me feel sorry for your MC, and you caught me with her final ride. You did a good job with the topic. I enjoyed the poem.
Marilyn Schnepp 03/15/08
I didn't get the topic in this litle poem; however, its probably just me; but it rhymed well, with the exception of the 2nd and 3rd verse. A pleasant tale of mystery in poetic form.
Jan Ackerson 03/17/08
Great zinger in the last stanza!
Debbie Wistrom03/17/08
Ouch. The sad ending aside, I enjoyed the pictures you created.
Yvonne Blake 03/17/08
A poem!
It's so sad, but a lesson to learn. We can't complain about being left behind.
I liked the different modes of transportation, and I guessed what the last stanza might be.
Well done. Thanks for writing this.
Lyn Churchyard03/17/08
Oh boy! That was some Ride for Miss Lilly. Great take on the topic. Poor Miss Lilly, good job Mr Dub, real good.
jodie banner03/17/08
How sad! Wasn't expecting that ending.
william price03/17/08
A lot of poems this week nd this is another great one. Enjoyed the unexpected end. God bless.
Mandy White03/18/08
A great reminder not to just sit and let life pass you by.
Sara Harricharan 03/19/08
ah, so sad at the end. The last verse though, was my favorite! I liked the character you painted of Miss Lilly it was seeing her in a completely different view! ^_^
Henry Clemmons03/19/08
Very visual and honest. Enjoyed this.
c clemons03/20/08
The last 2 stanzas were the best. For those two I give you a good job!