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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Every Dark Cloud has a Silver Lining" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (02/28/08)

TITLE: Naomi Ponders
By Sharlyn Guthrie
03/05/08


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Because of you, wee one, who coos in the crook of my withered arm; because of you I know my God remembers.

Hunger banished my family from our home. Refugees we were, beset by weariness and suppressed by loneliness in a strange, distant land. Discouragement and fear stalked us. Death overtook us. God dealt with me so bitterly I was certain Iíd been forgotten. But all is well, wee one. I know my God remembers.

Because of you, precious one, who curls tiny fingers around my gnarled, arthritic one; because of you I know my God redeems.

What overwhelming loss I experienced! Your devoted grandfather and our two beloved sons were snatched from me. Who would comfort me? Who would further my family? Who even cared if I lived or died? Too old to marry, and too poor to support your mother, I begged her to leave me and return to her mother and father. She refused, fierce in her loyalty to me. Although I had nothing to offer her, she left the country of her birth. She was better to me than seven sons. Her humble, honorable actions caught your papaís eye. Your papa, my husbandís kinsman, took pity on us. He has become our deliverer; our rescuer. I know my God redeems.

Because of you, little one, whose breath is warm and sweet against my wrinkled cheek; because of you I know my God rewards.

Hope had dispersed like chaff in the wind. Dreams had dissolved into tears. The outlook was dismal and bleak. This day, this moment, this fulfillment of hopes and dreams I dared not believe in or even wish for. But God smiled on me; smiled upon your mother; blessed His humble servants. I know my God rewards.

Because of you, cherished one, whose curious eyes quicken my aged heart and lighten my faltering steps; because of you, I know my God restores.

My home, my family, my lineage will endure. I am called blessed among Bethlehemís women. If my sons, Mahlon and Chilion, had lived and fathered many children, none would hold as much promise as you -my delightful grandson, Obed. You are my fulfillment, my future, my renewer of hopes and dreams. My nights are restful, my days filled with purpose, because of you. I know my God restores.




Based on the book of Ruth


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Patty Wysong03/08/08
I could hear her murmuring this as she sat and rocked him. Nicely done.
Karen Wilber 03/10/08
Beautiful rendering of Naomi holding Obed. I enjoyed this portrayal. Favorite part?--the recurring refrain about God's goodness. Well done.
Henry Clemmons03/11/08
Very poetic like. One of my favorite Bible accounts. I could tell you have a great heart.
Debbie Wistrom03/11/08
Very moving, I especially was drawn to the repeated last sentences of each paragraph, redeemed, rewarded, restored, what more should we want.
Betty Castleberry03/11/08
I love the entire book of Ruth. You did a good job giving us a behind the scenes peek at a portion of it. Well done.
LauraLee Shaw03/11/08
Oh, just beautiful. Anointed piece.
Chely Roach03/12/08
I absolutely love this...
Sara Harricharan 03/12/08
I think the title is okay, the story is so well done, that by the time we reach the end, I don't need to know that it's based on the Book of Ruth, because I knew it could only be Naomi with a grandson named Obed. lol. This was really good, the descriptions were great, especially the repeating lines with the baby. I liked it. ^_^
Jan Ackerson 03/12/08
I love this--especially the several times where you contrasted Obed's baby-ness with Naomi's age. Just beautiful.
Joanne Sher 03/12/08
I love this, Sharlyn - so sweet and delicate, and the language is absolutely beautiful. A wonderful Bible story choice for this topic (I picked it too hehe). What makes you think you missed the mark, my friend? I don't see it.
Sherry Castelluccio 03/12/08
How did you miss the mark? This was beautiful, well written and charming. It was also a unique approach to a familiar bible story. I liked it very much.
Beckie Stewart03/12/08
I enjoyed this rendition of Naomi and Obed!
Joshua Janoski03/12/08
I love the Book of Ruth. Beautiful writing! I really enjoyed this.
Beth LaBuff 03/13/08
Every chosen word is perfect and you've paid such attention to Biblical detail. Your example is perfect for the topic.