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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Every Dark Cloud has a Silver Lining" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (02/28/08)

TITLE: Accidentally Friends
By Donna Emery
03/03/08


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Hey, finally: a roommate my own age. What’s your name? Nice to meet you, Mark. I’m Colin. What happened to me? Just a stupid accident, that’s all. This whole deal is gonna be a humongous waste of time.

I had to show off. I had to try the rock climbing activity, just ‘cause my buddy Zack dared me and I was too macho to say “no.”

When I looked up that rock wall, I figured even root canal without Novocain might be a better choice, but my stupid pride said, “bring it on, dude!” I let the attendant strap me into a harness, and up I went.

And – as you can see by these casts and braces – down I came.

It was totally bogus, man. I was looking straight up, just so I didn’t have to look down – and my foot missed a rung and I fell. My leg is broken in two places, my arm is shattered and I have three broken ribs. The doctors say I’ll be in the hospital for at least another week – and then I have to go to this stupid rehab place so I can learn to walk and use my arm. I’ve heard about that place: that’s where the geezers go when they break their hips. Their idea of a choice of activities is bingo or bonus bingo. Loads of fun – NOT.

What’s up with you? A car accident? Your best friend? Aw, man, that’s awful. Your leg looks worse than mine, and your face is messed up pretty bad. Are you in pain? Do you want me to call the nurse? Hey, I don’t mind. There, I pushed the button. She’ll come pretty quickly; they’re nice here.

Hey! Isn’t that a brochure for the Westside Rehab on your nightstand? You have to go there, too? Awesome! I’ll have somebody my own age to talk to!

What are you looking at, dude? My Bible? Yeah, that’s the only thing that keeps me sane around here. No, man – I’m no Holy Roller; not that there’s anything wrong with those dudes. I just have faith in God and believe in Jesus. Sure, I go to church. Nah, it’s not just for losers. There are lots of great guys – and some really nice-looking girls - in my youth group. My buddy, Zack goes to youth group too; you’d like him – and nobody could call Zack a loser.

Yeah, that nurse is nice, isn’t she? Told you she’d come quickly. I hope they are nice like that at the rehab. Well… whatever…. I know God will take care of us both.

You don’t believe in God? I used to be like that. But how can you look around at all the amazing stuff in nature and history and not wonder Who created us and why we’re here? Look at our bodies and how all the parts work together; that can’t have happened by chance. And how can you look at all the bad things going on in the world and get through it without God’s help? I just know God brought us all here for a purpose. What? This? Yeah, I guess I do think God has a purpose for my accident. No joke; I really do. Not that I know what it is, but I totally believe He does.

Hey, man, you’re nodding off. Guess that pain med is kicking in. I’ll leave you to rest, for now. After all, we’ve got plenty of time to talk about the Lord and whatever else you want to talk about. You know, I guess going to that rehab place won’t be so bad, after all - since we’ll be there together.


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Holly Westefeld03/06/08
As a monologue, this works fine.
As a representation of rock climbing, however, it rings quite unrealistic, barring gross neglegence that would leave the facility open to a huge lawsuit. I'm not saying people don't get hurt rock climbing, but injuries of this magnitude are highly improbable under standard safety protocols. For an account of basic climbing, see my story "Without Belay" from the "don't try to walk before you can crawl" challenge.
Shirley McClay 03/07/08
Wow.. I've never tried to write a monologue! Nicely done.
LauraLee Shaw03/07/08
Very entertaining. :)
Seema Bagai 03/09/08
Creatively written. Good job.
TJ Nickel03/12/08
Liked it, nice humor woven in. Good voice.
Sara Harricharan 03/13/08
oooh, when I heard Colin, I was immediately thinking of the secret garden, but this was very interesting! I liked the monolouge and especially the cheerful/humorous note to this guy who's had a bad accident...on a dare. My one contradiction, was it the same guy from his youth group/church that dared him to try rock climbing? Otherwise, nice story! ^_^