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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Easter (05/30/05)

TITLE: With Him
By Melanie Kerr
05/31/05


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I never thought
That we would meet
That I would know
Your presence sweet
I never thought
I'd want to be
This close to you
Oh no - not me!

To think I've heard
The words you said
That stir my heart
And turn my head
Absurd to think
You could forgive,
That through your death
I could live

Too late to know
Your healing touch
Bestowed on those
Loved so much
I'll never see
The lame man walk
The leper cured
The dumb man talk

Now I know
But not too late
That love is stronger
Than all my hate
I know for sure
Why I must die
That you must too -
I'm not sure why

Now I see
Your head bowed low
Nails delivered
By a cruel blow
I see the flesh
Rent apart
Arm stretched wide -
To show God's heart?

Now I see
My eyes divine
Your ugly cross
So close to mine
Darkness falls
The earth turns cold
Faith ignites
And makes me bold

"Remember me"
The words are said
Hope that whirled
Inside my head
"When you come
To take your throne
Take me as
Your very own."

No right I have
With nought to give
That in your Kingdom
I should live
Too late for prayers
And worship song
But by your side
I would belong

"I tell the truth,"
I hear you say
"In paradise
You'll be today.
Standing by
My side you'll be
Cleansed, forgiven
Just wait and see."

With love I gaze
Upon Your face
Amazed that I've
Received your grace
What joy is mine
That I with be
With you for all
Eternity


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Melanie Kerr 06/06/05
Sorry - the last bit of the last verse should read:-

"What joy is mine
That I will be
With you for all
Eternity"

You will never know just how often I checked this through and still missed the mistake!
Karri Compton06/06/05
Nicely done. I liked the rhythm of four syllables per line, but you got away from that. It would be nice if the whole poem was uniform in meter.
Kathy Bruins06/06/05
Great thoughts!
Sally Hanan06/06/05
Very touching.
Karen Treharne06/06/05
This was beautifully written and a blessing to read - it brought tears to my eyes as I imagined the criminal's thoughts that you portrayed in this lovely poem. Yours in Christ
dub W06/08/05
The beat shift in the second stanza bothers me a little, I understand the shift in the final stanza, but the second stands out. The poem is well posed, and carries a wonderful meaning. Generally, well done.
Val Clark06/08/05
Thank you, Melanie, for composing this poem wth such care. Really like the twist when the Point Of View is revealed.
Shari Armstrong 06/09/05
A very moving poem!
Linda Germain 06/09/05
Touched my heart. I loved it! ~LG~