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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Every Dark Cloud has a Silver Lining" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (02/28/08)

TITLE: White Blurs
By Henry Clemmons
03/02/08


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Heart pounds so fast
  and hard it quakes in fright
No time to swerve
  or pray or blink an eye
White blurs at speeds
  of ninety plus at night.

Wrong lane high beams
  my god I see the light
Car flips glass breaks
  Im flung so quick I fly
Heart pounds so fast
  and hard it quakes in fright.

No time to think
  if I had lived life right
My Shoulder breaks
  legs crack I start to cry
White blurs at speeds
  of ninety plus at night.

Wet grass warm blood
  fresh tears all mix in blight
Shorts gasps of air
  I struggle not to die
Heart pounds so fast
  and hard it quakes in fright.

I hear a voice
  there was no car in sight
A tree had fell
  and blocked my path on by
Heart pounds so fast
  and hard it quakes in fright
White blurs at speeds
  of ninety plus at night.

God saved my life
  white blurs as angels speed
Now roll to church
  my chair is on four wheels
Heartaches at peace
  I praise the Lord indeed.

Warm winds turn cool
  Fall leaves blush red from green
Eyes blue tear up
  I want this to be real
God Saved my life
  white blurs as angels speed.

Acorns fall down
  and plant themselves as seeds
They lie and die
  silent and make no deals
Heartaches at peace
  I praise the Lord indeed.

Moist lips upturned
  sing songs of my new creed
Old man had died
  under my cars cold steel
God saved my life
  white blurs as angels speed.

Arose from death
  survived and was set free
Jesus my strength
  regardless how I feel
God saved my life
  white blurs as angels speed
Heartaches at peace
  I praise the Lord indeed.


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Debbie Wistrom03/07/08
If this is true, you are truly blessed. Either way great way of telling a sad but heartlifting story. Keep up the good words.
Shirley McClay 03/07/08
I admire anyone who can write a poem! I have no ability here at all!This seemed to me, however, like the potential lyrics of a song.
LauraLee Shaw03/07/08
Begins with emotion and pain, and ends with emotion and blessing. Moving piece.
Dianne Janak03/08/08
I loved this! If it was true, what a powerful story. If it is fiction, what a powerful storyteller.. the words were just right to pierce my heart and make me think, praise God and reflect. Good work... Loved it...
Sharlyn Guthrie03/11/08
Your poem reveals just enough of the story in each stanza, and the repetition holds it all together like glue. Well done.
Chely Roach03/12/08
Wonderful poem...I loved it.
Sara Harricharan 03/12/08
This is great! I loved the choppy sort of feel to it that gave urgency to the poem. The title of white blurs and how it plays in with the rest of this was great. You did well! ^_^
Jan Ackerson 03/12/08
The structure of this poem is magnificent, with the repetition that unifies each stanza, and the pacing that feels just like the surreal events as they're unfolding. Wow.

One tiny thing--"legs" should not have an apostrophe. Oops.

This is really a masterpiece, and I'm privileged to have read it.
Betty Castleberry03/12/08
Powerful, bold, riveting. This is very well done.
Joanne Sher 03/12/08
Very well done - the meter is just right, and I love the use of repetition and the wonderful storytelling. Very moving.
Patty Wysong03/12/08
Oh. my. What a story--a very vivid story unfolded here. I felt like I was seeing the flashes of light...great job.
Celeste Ammirata03/12/08
I love the way you wrote this poem. It's so realistic. I love the rhythm Great job.