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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Actions Speak Louder than Words" (without using the actual phrase). (02/21/08)

TITLE: Very-Very Much
By Pat Guy
02/27/08


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She made sure we knew…
she found a way
to say,
“I love you.”
For you see
she was paralyzed by death’s grip.
No hope
in the form of disease.
Yes, our mom was dying,
could not speak her mind,
but she found a way
to say,
“I love you.”

She was so weak. We held her hand.

The doctors of course denied…
said she no longer knew.
The slightest movement was no use.
Not medically, anyway.
The nurses’ treatment of her body at times
was unkind.
But we had made promises…
and we kept them;
fiercely.
Feeling guilty, feeling helpless
against the critical sounds
of life,
we found a way to reach her.

She was in so much pain. We stroked her brow.

That morning our anger broke…
that morning God spoke
and we knew
she was going Home.
No longer could she move a finger,
no longer could she move her foot.
Our father needed to say goodbye,
too frail to be by her side,
we set the speakerphone on high;
and his words were of love,
of hope,
and “One day soon.”

She raised her eyebrows three times. We told him what she said.

A tear glistened the corner of her lashes--
so tiny,
it disappeared at my sister’s touch.
Our tears unashamed of their sorrow,
hearts racing, knowing
finality was near;
the beep of moments fading.
Her heart reaching, leaving;
breathing no longer her own,
but she made sure we knew…
she found a way
to say,
“I love you, very-very much.”

Her chains were gone … she’d been set free.


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Holly Westefeld02/28/08
Beautiful. I'm still crying. I read my poem of farewell to my dad via speaker phone, just over two years ago, and was assured by my step-sister of a contented sigh.
Catrina Bradley 02/28/08
Heartbreaking and spirit-lifting at the same time. A lot of emotion in your words. Thank you for sharing your heart.
LauraLee Shaw02/29/08
I am weeping. I just lost my mom in much the same way a year and a half ago. You opened my heart up with this authentic and moving piece in a way I needed. Masterful.
Seema Bagai 03/03/08
This left me speechless with tears in my eyes. Masterfully written.
Hanne Moon03/03/08
Absolutely beautiful. So much emotion packed in those words. A wonderful tribute to an obviously wonderful mother.
Patty Wysong03/03/08
Good thing I was ready with a tissue--I'm using it. This is beautiful. She must've been a beautiful lady!!
Leigh MacKelvey03/03/08
The emotion was vividly written! I loved the form and the little "aside" thoughts. Very, very nice!
Jan Ackerson 03/03/08
Pat, I'm in awe that you could write a poem of such surpassing beauty when these events are so recent and so raw. You're my hero.
Lynda Schultz 03/03/08
Sometimes words are inadequate—and this is one of them. What a memory to treasure.
Karen Wilber 03/03/08
Beautiful - especially the final stanza. What a wonderful gift from your mother.
Betty Castleberry03/03/08
Oh my, this is written with such feeling and tenderness. I just love it. "Very-very" good!
Joanne Sher 03/04/08
I am also amazed that you could do this so soon after the events. This is absolutely touching and deep and heartwrenching. I hope it was also therapeutic, my dear friend.
Debbie Wistrom03/04/08
Such love, your are bery blessed, in many ways.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/04/08
You crystallized forever the beautiful sad/happy moments of your mother's journey to heaven. The words "beep of moments fading" captured so much meaning.
Chely Roach03/05/08
So beautiful...so sad. Lovely.
Loren T. Lowery03/05/08
This evokes so much emotion that it can only be described in one word, bittersweet. What a wonderful woman this was, what a wonderful tribute and message you delivered from her to us, the reader. What a tremedous way to demonstrate hope for us all.
Tim Pickl03/05/08
You say so very-very much with so few words. Tears... thanks for writing deep from your heart.
Joshua Janoski03/05/08
Wow...While this story has a very sad element to it, I find great hope in it.

I picture a woman ready to meet her maker, but at the same time, she also wants to be sure that her family knows how much she cares, before she makes the transition from her frail Earthly body to her beautiful brand new Heavenly body.

To be able to deliver such a powerful message amidst the mourning is very commendable. A beautiful tribute!
Julie Arduini03/05/08
You brought me back to my goodbye with my dad. This was emotional, real, and anointed. I'm sure it wasn't easy to write. Thank you for doing so.
Sherry Castelluccio 03/05/08
Wow, this is powerful stuff. What a comfort it must be to those who have been in this situation. Awesome work.
Lyn Churchyard03/05/08
That was beautiful. It brought back memories of my mother's last days in hospital. Wonderfully written Pat.
Sara Harricharan 03/05/08
The last line of this is so special! It really did take something to write this and Kudos to you for writing it! You captured every emotion here and ended it with slivers of hope and love mixed together. Beautiful writing! ^_^
terri tiffany03/14/08
Yes- I loved this! It was beautifully written and touched me so much. You did a great job and I loved the ending!!