The Official Writing Challenge
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02/29/08
Loved that surprise at the ending, added real depth to the story.
03/04/08
Wow, what an intriguing story, and then you put that twister at the end. Creative approach to the topic.
03/04/08
Great descriptions, and a great fit for the topic. The twist really got me too.
03/04/08
Nice twist there at the end! I can see a pastor who would stop on the side walk like that go into a bar, without hesitation. I really liked this!
You did a good job of portraying a pastor who really has the right actions, who does what Jesus would do.
Aunt Minnie is the perfect foil for your MC and his satellite characters and contrasting positive elements of your story; I love the way you used her contrariness and a smidge of humor to play up the central theme and the several other messages you conveyed so well.