The Official Writing Challenge
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02/29/08
She sure didn't get it - that's for sure. You set up a very vivid contrast between the two characters - very nicely done. Love the title, too. Much to learn here.
03/02/08
What an engaging story from title to end, and the format you chose made it that much better. Well done.
03/03/08
Great title and an engaging story.
03/03/08
Oh sometimes we just don't get it, do we? Love the simplicity of one point of view and how well it tells the story. Great job!
03/03/08
Great job telling this story and illustrating the topic in a diary format. Love it!
03/03/08
Ouch!

I like that you chose to keep her clueless, rather than having a sudden, tidy epiphany. Some people are just like that, and it gave your story a real punch. Very good!
03/03/08
What a great visual of two sides of the coin! Both types of actions that spoke volumes - yet one didn't learn a thing! What a great take Peej! I just loved it!
Perfect title. Loved/hated your MC. I hope she leaned her lesson, but I think not.
THANKS for the eye-opener.
You really created a strong character in you clueless MC. This was very realistiaclly don.
Loved the format and the descriptive writing. I was rmeined of a mission trip I took to Juarez, Mexico!Stinky holes in the ground for toilets! Your MC also reminds me of some of the snobby teen-agers who went along just for the " fun"! Nice writing.
What is sad is there are so many blinded by their own attitudes and actions and they really cannot see like this girl. This was well written.
03/05/08
Awesome title, awesome story. Sadly I know this exists because I've seen it!
03/05/08
WOW. This is certainly a whole different look on a mission trip. You took a different POV and made it so real. I liked Cindy though. She was different. and not goody-two shoes different, but real different. Nice writing. ^_^
"A piece of cake" eh? Yep, she loves people and new experiences. Peej, you have done a great job here of putting across the topic. A masterful entry!
Oh, this was another guilty pleasure. The poor girl really was clueless, wasn't she? Well, done, this was too much fun. Hee hee, I just rhymed! Great story with a great lesson to boot.
03/06/08
Oh Peej! What a great piece of work! I love it! and love your title!
Laury