The Official Writing Challenge
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02/28/08
What a cute and creative idea!

Small red ink: I would've liked to know the girls' ages...not necessarily having you spell it out, but maybe some other clues, like how long they had been friends or what grade they were in at school or something...when they were playing checkers I thought they were a little older, then they were playing on the slide and the sandbox, which makes me think they were younger.

No matter really. Your EXTREMELY clever take on the topic still got through. I hated it. Just kidding. ;)
This was hard to read, but that was ok, it worked, your message was delivered well. I loved all the giggling.