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Very on-topic poem. Good job.
03/01/08
Your title really got my curiosity going. : ) This type of poetry is not easy to write and youíve done a great job with the rhyme and meter. Iím truly impressed. Youíve chosen the perfect names for the ladies. Dame Bumble -- which she definitely did. : ), then Dame Humble -- what a beautiful character. I loved this: With a loud clap of thunder,
In Bumble would blunder, - And the houses would shiver and shake. - She would shatter the glass, - And shrivel the grass, - And the earth would a-quiver and quake. Youíve done really nice work on this creative entry.



03/02/08
Very entertaining poem!

A poet as gifted as you is ready to move on to more complex and unexpected rhymes--rhymes of two or three syllables, fewer cliche' rhymes like "love" and "above". I know you can do it--this is superb!
03/02/08
Love your title and the message in this toe tapper. Well done.
Nice job with this rolicking rhythm, and clear illustration of the topic. Unless you needed the word count, I think you could have omitted the final stanza, as you had done such a good job of showing, that telling was unnecessary.