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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Actions Speak Louder than Words" (without using the actual phrase). (02/21/08)

TITLE: Amy's Carless Ways
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02/24/08


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Amy was sixteen and every so often she was reminded by her Grandma Wilson that words were good but putting words into motion, was always a much better way to go. Amy loved her grandma but she could be quite a task-master, especially when she wanted something done.

And so it was, on a bright October day that Amy was walking to her grandma’s to help with some fall cleaning. Amy told her grandma on the phone the night before that she would be there to help her the following day, around nine in the morning.

It was already nine-thirty the next day and Amy was strolling down the street, just minutes away from where her grandma lived. Amy was always promising to be somewhere but seldom arriving on time..

At nine-thirty six she arrived and began walking up the steps to her grandma’s house. Just before she reached the top step she turned around and saw her boyfriend driving by. When he saw her, he honked the horn and immediately she ran back down the stairs and to his car. They began chatting and before long she totally forgot her grandma’s needs for fall clean-up.

After talking with her boyfriend, Paul, she got into the car and they sped off down the street. From her large bay window, Grandma Wilson saw her granddaughter get into the car and leave. She murmured, “There she goes, again! I wish she wouldn’t do that! The family doesn’t know that boy well and she could be putting her life in danger! Guess I’d better call her mother.”

She went to the phone and dialed. “Helen. Your mother. Just saw Amy get into a car with that Paul person. Do you know anything about him at all?”

“Mom, Paul is O.K. Dan and I have met and talked with him several times. But, I don’t like the fact that she didn’t do what she was supposed to do today—help you out with your fall cleaning.”

“It’s alright Helen. I can do the work myself but I am disturbed that she is so flighty and unreliable. Will you call me when she gets home? I do worry about her.”

“Sure Mom. Will do. And, I’ll make sure that she helps you out—probably sometime next week. And, I’ll remind her that it’s impolite and uncaring not to do something that is promised.”

“Thanks Helen. Take care and I’ll talk with you soon.”

Well, Grandma Wilson went ahead and did the work by herself but while working with some curtains in a back bedroom, she lost her balance and fell hard on to the floor. Luckily, she had on a medical device which quickly brought an ambulance and was found to be alright, except for a few bruises.

Once Amy found out what happened to her grandma, she vowed that she would be more careful and caring in the future, especially when committing herself to help another.

As with many things in life, if one learns a lesson from any kind of failure or unkept promise, one matures and does better the next time. Looks like in this case, Amy learned a valuable lesson on commitment and helping others…


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Jesse Blair03/01/08
Good example of teenagers bailing out for something better.


Jacquelyn Horne03/01/08
Commitment is a hard lesson to learn. Hopefully, Amy will change her habits as she vows to do.
Jan Ackerson 03/01/08
Oh, those teenagers! I'm glad that you didn't make Amy horrid, just irresponsible.

I wish you'd showed us Amy's reaction upon hearing that her grandmother fell, instead of telling us. The ending just seemed a little bit too neat and "wrapped up." Oh, and check the title: you wanted "Careless", not "Carless."

I like the attitudes of both the mother and the grandmother in this story.
Beth LaBuff 03/01/08
I enjoyed Amy’s story and was glad she learned her lesson. The poor grandma (waiting and then falling while doing the work herself.) Amy’s actions definitely were directly opposite of her words (in the beginning). This is a nice story to illustrate the topic.
c clemons03/03/08
Whose voice is this? In other words who is the POV? The dialogue was a little stilted and vaguely on topic. I say vaguely because I may clean homes not because I love the people but I am following thru with a commitment and I will be paid. I know that sometimes proofreading is time consuming but it is a must especially for the title. Keep writing.