The Official Writing Challenge
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02/29/08
Good story. I'm sure this situation is more common than we realize.
03/01/08
Excellent title, and really good story.

What would you think of ending with "How could YOU, my daughter?" That's a great kicker, and you've done a good enough writing job that the reader knows what the narrator will do now. It's always good to leave 'em with a POW.
03/01/08
Very sad, yet an all too familiar story. This message, “I saw myself through God’s eyes, and I was ashamed” is very good. More than one lesson was learned by your MC. Your title is perfect. Very good writing --`from Brother Bantine’s television words to your MC’s thoughts!
I like stories that bring us all to repentance. Good job.