The Official Writing Challenge
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Good story. I'm sure this situation is more common than we realize.
Excellent title, and really good story.

What would you think of ending with "How could YOU, my daughter?" That's a great kicker, and you've done a good enough writing job that the reader knows what the narrator will do now. It's always good to leave 'em with a POW.
Very sad, yet an all too familiar story. This message, “I saw myself through God’s eyes, and I was ashamed” is very good. More than one lesson was learned by your MC. Your title is perfect. Very good writing --`from Brother Bantine’s television words to your MC’s thoughts!
I like stories that bring us all to repentance. Good job.