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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Actions Speak Louder than Words" (without using the actual phrase). (02/21/08)

TITLE: KABOOOM!
By Jesse Blair
02/23/08


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“Ya, I’ll get that sparkly one. A couple of the smokeys…a few snappers…and a deal of sparklers.”
“That it?”
“Uhhh…yea.”
“What, you going to a kiddie carnival or something? That stuff stinks.”
“It’s cheap.”
“But it stinks.”
“What do you suppose I get.”
“The Explosion.”
“No thanks.”
“No, no, look: ‘The Explosion: cascading fireballs, all the colors of the rainbow, mushroom cloud at the end.’”
“Mushroom cloud at the end?”
“Yes. Like nuclear bomb.”
“I doubt it.”
“Why? It says so on box.”
“That’s just some gunpowder and food coloring. It can’t possibly simulate a nuclear bomb.”
“Yes.”
“No.”
“My products…only good ones. No bad ones. Everyone buying this. It’s real good.”
“How much?”
“Ummm, usually a hundred n fifty. I sell it to you a hundred n thirty.”
“Fifty.”
“hundred n ten.”
“sixty.”
“Hundred. No less.”
“Sixty.”
“No way. Only a hundred.”
“A hundred bucks for a firecracker?!!! Whattya take me for?”
“It’s a nuclear bomb man. Real good.”
“I don’t buy it.”
“You want me to light one?”
“I don’t want to die of radiation.”
“No radiation. Only mushroom cloud.”
“If they’re so valuable, why would you light one?”
“They’re cool.”
“Okay. Go for it.”
“Get out of the way…run!”
KAABOOOM!
“Woah!”
“Yeah.”
“Sixty.”
“Hundred. No less.”
“Seventy.”
“Ninety-five.”
“Seventy-five.”
“Ninety-two fifty.”
“Eighty-two fifty.”
“Eight-seven fifty.”
“Eighty-five. I don’t got change.”
“Eighty-seven.”
“Eighty-six.”
“Okay.”


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Jan Ackerson 02/29/08
Hmmmm...interesting dialogue, and it definitely sounds like real people, but I'd really have liked some context. I'm not clear of your message, nor of how this relates to this weeks' proverb.

You really have a good touch with authentic speech.
Beth LaBuff 03/01/08
The “mushroom cloud at the end” was just plain fun! The bartering was quite comical…I kept wondering what the end price would be. :) I’m thinking you know quite a bit about this subject you wrote about. :)Your title says it all!