The Official Writing Challenge
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02/28/08
Wonderfully written. I think this looks like the beginning of a much longer piece. Great job.
02/29/08
What an apt allegory!

Your 3rd paragraph begins: "Usually, Conan always sat..." Is it usually, or always? Can't be both...

That's my only nitpick on this piece--I loved it!
02/29/08
Your story is very creative. Your descriptions of the wall (and the symbolism) and what’s on the other side had me engrossed. I could almost picture the grassy amphitheatre and the ceiling. These line(s) were great, “staring at the world beyond. It was very much like their own, perhaps a bit more stark but salvageable.” Your ending left me wanting to read more….so excellent writing!
More please. I'd like to hear the before (why the wall0 and the after. Keep writing.
Subtle pov here. Good message.
I enjoyed this creative story. Your setting was masterfully painted.