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02/28/08
I really liked this. It made me think. It made me wonder. It is so true, and we are all guilty. Well done! Perfectly on topic..
02/29/08
Love the voice AND the message. So true, too.
02/29/08
You’re a master at creating suspense. You’ve created a lot of questions for the reader and some are answered. There is a lot of depth in Albert’s character and he is quite interesting in a “Robinhood-ish” sort of way. I know there are many things that we in our lives “don’t get”. Very good writing on this piece.
Good article. Informative and good pov.
03/03/08
Great piece...this could also fit the topic 'walk a mile in their shoes'. Most people who have never been there, or even close to it, don't get it. Good job!
03/03/08
Nice job with the topic! Your dialogue is wonderful, and Albert is such a multi-faceted character! Very thought-provoking!
I like the slam against the tobacco companies. This flowed well and was meanigful. THANKS for the message.
03/03/08
Albert is an AWESOME character! Love it!
Your MC left with his "I've doon goodness" and Albert was left with "Albertness" which DID good. This was a great example for the topic. I guess you can tell--I really liked Albert and the way you described him so creatively with his "Albertness."
03/05/08
I loved your interesting characters, and your note at the end put an EXCLAMATION MARK on the piece. Well done.
03/05/08
Nice take on the topic. I liked how it left me pondering....hmmmm
03/05/08
This was a great message that will stick with me a lot longer than most meals. What a powerful footnote at the end.
This definitely gets you thinking.
Smart writing. You left me thinking about your words. Albert was an appealing character too. Thank you for sharing!
03/06/08
Your heart for this subject shows through so well in this story. Even after watching him give the ten to someone else, she still didn't get it. Great writing.
03/06/08
Heehee, what an interesting character this Albert is. I liked the phrase with "Albertness" cute.