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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Actions Speak Louder than Words" (without using the actual phrase). (02/21/08)

TITLE: Pastor John's White Leather Seats
By Dee Yoder
02/22/08


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“Well, well, my congregation knows a good man when they see one.”

“Uh huh.”

“I took Bobby Joe on over to his lot, and when he showed me that nice red Cadillac with those white leather seats, whoop boy! That just reminded me of what Heaven is all about.”

“Right.”

“I says to him, I says…’Bobby, now yonder sits the kind of ride a preacher deeserves’. Know what I mean, Sister?”

“Uh huh.”

“And then, ol’ Bobby, he just takes his big ol’ black marker, he does, an’ he just-phhht! Like that! Marks that red beauty ‘SOLD’. Hands me the keys, he does.”

“Hmmm.”

“Did you HEAR me, sister?”

“I heard you.”

“Ain’t that just the way the Lord works?”

“Uh…”

“Well, ain’t it?”

“I don’t know…”

“What d’you mean? He says, now, don’t He…He gives us the desires of our hearts…an’ boy howdy! I desired that good lookin’ ride, and He moved on Bobby Joe’s spirit to give it to me. Ain’t the Lord goooood? And I mean extry good.”

“I don’t know…it doesn’t seem to me that that’s exactly what the Lord meant.”

“What? You a little jealous, eh?”

“No, I’m not jealous, not in the least. It’s just…”

“Well, never mind. I plan to turn heads come Sunday mornin’ when this ol’ preacher boy rides on inta church!”

“Don’t you wonder, though, what some of the folks might be thinking-?”

“Thinkin’? I ain’t done nothin’ wrong, and the Good Book says the laborer is worthy of his hire, don’t it?”

“Well, again, it’s a matter for interpretation.”

“Interpretation? You sure do worry a lot; you know that? I wouldn’t do nothin’ the Lord wouldn’t want me to.”

“I have second thoughts about this though--wait. There’s the phone.”

“Who izzit? Don’t wave me off! Who’s callin’?”

“It’s Mrs. Peterson.”

“Mrs. Peterson? I ain’t here! Ha-ha.”

“She’d like you to come by and pick up her son for Sunday School this week. She’s sick and says he’s trying to win the prize for perfect attendance.”

“What? In my new car? Why, that kid don’t know which way is up, much less where the bathroom is-he wears them diapers. Don’t you shush me! I’m the senior pastor here!”

“Well, she’ll hear you-”

“Gimme that phone.”

Please, be kind…you know how much her boy means to her.”

“Yeah, yeah…go on over there and let me handle this. Uh…Sister Peterson? This here’s Pastor John. Uh huh…I’m fine, fine. Now about this Sunday…ya see, I’m goin’ to be bringin’ the new State Superintendent. An’ I’m sorry, but there’s just not goin’ ta be any room in my car. Understand? Uh huh. Well, I was sure you would, Sister. Right. You tell little ol’ Tommy that Pastor’s sure sorry. Uh huh. You have a great day, too, sister. Bubbye now.”

“You didn’t tell her the truth!”

“A little white lie won’t hurt her none. It’s better’n tellin’ her about that kid of hers, isn’t it? Don’t look at me like that! I got to study my sermon. Go on and get those bulletins stapled together.”

“Your sermon outline is on your desk.”

“Fine. Fine. You’re ‘bout the best secretary I ever did have, you know that? Hey, wait a minute…what’s that sentence there at the top of the page?”

“It’s from Ezekiel 34. That part says, ‘…Woe to the shepherds of Israel who only take care of themselves*…’”

“My, my. Them Israelites just never did get the message, did they? Tsk. Tsk. Well, ought to be a mighty good sermon this Sunday! Could even get that old skinflint Taylor to let loosa his money. Yessirree. Go on and get your work done, now. I’ll be in my office. And, Sister Grant?”

“Yes?”

“Hold my calls. Cain’t afford to be interrupted while I’m writin’ my sermon, now can I?”

“Right. Can’t afford that.”


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Verna Cole Mitchell 02/28/08
How cleverly you "showed" us how "Actions speak louder than words." I loved your story--glad your MC is not my pastor.
Lynda Schultz 02/29/08
Someone once told me that you'll never make it up the ladder to Bishop, unless you always purchase and drive a black sedan. I guess this pastor isn't going to make it—for more reasons than a red Cadillac with white seats. Very good.
Julie Arduini03/01/08
I loved this. I always tell people no matter what the office setting, the wisest one in any given office is always the receptionist---treat her with respect. Too bad Pastor didn't know the wealthiest thing in his church was her!
Leigh MacKelvey03/02/08
Loved the dialogue! the accent was wonderful, the pastor was NOT! Great interpretation of the topic and such an enjoyable read! I'm sure it will resonant well with all who read it.
Hanne Moon 03/02/08
Good example of the topic! Loved the voice! Glad he's not my pastor! LOL
Lyn Churchyard03/02/08
Excellent! I could actually hear him speaking (reminded me of a pastor I had years ago). You've done a great job, well done.
Pamela Murphey03/03/08
Good Illustration of the topic. I was drawn in waiting for the pastor to redeem his character, sadly he never did.
Patty Wysong03/03/08
Wow, but you nailed that dialog!! Great job! Although I don't Pastor John should have a job much longer!! LoL--I loved it. :)
Jan Ackerson 03/03/08
Oh, Dee, this was Dee-lightful! All-dialogue pieces are tricky, but this one is just right. Love the dialect and the distinct personalities your two characters show.
jodie banner03/03/08
This was a great representation of those "Pastors" who just seem to get it all wrong sometimes.I can only hope when the newness of the car wears off he'll see the light.
Pat Guy 03/03/08
Oh Dee! You're such a whiz at creating character with dialog! This might put the squeeze on 'some' but, it sho is tru ta life! ;)

Loved this Dee, and welcome girl - you did might fine.
Rita Garcia03/03/08
You have definitely made a smooth landing into Master’s!! Wonderful in every way!
Laury Hubrich 03/06/08
Wow, Dee! You nailed Pastor John's dialogue. So cool! Great writing and perfect for the topic!
Laury