The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/08
Wonderful imagery - I was swept away by your words. A lovely, sad, piece.
02/21/08
So many similes and metaphors! It was wonderful though. :)
02/23/08
Beautiful imagery. I felt as though I were tumbling with her.
02/23/08
Beautiful writing—almost lyrical.
02/24/08
How wonderfully you write poetic prose. My favorite paragraph is the second one--just beautiful. You illustrated the topic excellently with your sad story.
02/25/08
Love the beautiful but sad descriptive writing style.
02/27/08
I am in awe of your writing ability. Your descriptions are like that out of any best selling novel, and I was drawn in by them. This line melted my heart:
But her voice belied her heart, the way a mirror reflects an image one would rather ignore. Exposing the truth of a life lived in regret.

Wow.
02/27/08
You painted a picture with words in this piece. I could clearly see the scene and the character. Wonderful.
02/27/08
Oh WOW! You did really well with this. Using the land, the ranch as her 'other suitor' I didn't see that end coming at all. I thought something was going to happen, but I couldn't put my finger on it. The descriptions, everything, was so rich! I loved this piece! A favorite of mine this week! ^_^
02/27/08
I love your descriptions in your first two paragraphs, “kerchief/bib, lull of cow/lullaby, Cimarron River/wash tub), then your descriptions of Skylar (sun had faded her eyes to a soft denim, hair/burnished copper). I could see the land your described with it’s arroyos and rattlesnakes. Your picture of the land being a jealous suitor that demands and then is indifferent is amazing writing. Very powerful writing…but incredibly sad.
02/27/08
Well written, but so terribly sad.
02/27/08
No! No! It wasn't supposed to end that way.
Exquisite writing, nonetheless.
02/27/08
Masterful writing. This is no bomb. This is 'da bomb. (sorry)

You write phrases that roll around the brain and inspire the imagination:
"the dusty magic of wrangling"
"Her land, the jealous suitor, drank it in with indifference. "
02/27/08
I honestly, really enjoy your writing. Your voice is so relaxed and even paced it makes the reading experience fun and relaxing. I think you have a future in this. God bless.