The Official Writing Challenge
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02/22/08
oohh! So sad...now everyone's plans/surprise was spoiled. I loved your animal descriptions, " Yo-Yo, the “nutball cat from outer space,” greeted her with a tail lasso and purring loud enough to wake the goldfish, Buggles." Your pet names are just plain fun. Your title is cute. You are definitely on topic. Nice work.
02/22/08
Cute title. Sad ending. I felt sad at the end as if she'd only let go of the anger earlier, she might've seen what they were trying to surprise her with. Nice job. ^_^
02/23/08
I can tell you're an animal lover - your descriptions of the cat, especially, are wonderfully visual. A great piece with a great message.
02/24/08
There's so much to love here--what a unique and engaging voice!

A few things--I was never sure how old Cindy Lou was; I kept changing my opinion on that throughout the piece. And the rows of commas were a bit distracting, a simple three dots will do for an ellipsis.

This is creative, witty, with a superb irony at the end.



02/25/08
Being a cat lover, Yo-Yo is perfect. This is unique and I enjoyed it in spite of the sad end.
02/27/08
Oh I had a bad feeling when she ate the ice cream. Very well written!
02/27/08
Good story. I did not see that ending coming. I was a bit confused as to how old the character was, though. Overall, a good mix of humor and sadness.
02/27/08
I think I'd have called this one, No One Would Notice Anyway. You caught the MC's attitude perfectly, and the twist at the end was great.
02/27/08
Humor, sadness and regret all rolled into one story. Well done, well done!
03/14/08
The title hooked me into reading this. All I can say is, "Ditto, Ditto," to Lynne's words above!!