The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/08
OOOOhh! Very cleverly woven. Your title is great! (My imagination was going wild after reading it.) I must say...you caught me off guard with Amanda being the goth bully and the math tutor. Good work on this.
02/22/08
I love this from title to end. You built the suspense so well and even managed to put a twist at the end, which is difficult to do with these proverbs. Loved it!
Ouch, I must admit I saw this coming, great story and so right on topic. Keep up the good words, dialog was real to me.
02/22/08
Loved your title and the first line! At first I thought it was a big brother and not a big sister, but the ending was cute. I'm glad that she was able to take care of the bully-lol, but the suspension part...*sigh* that was her own fault. Nice job. ^_^
02/24/08
You've got the teenage voice dead on. Very, very good!
Oh, this is one of my favorites this week. It reminds me of how I took care of my younger brother. Great job!
This was well planned and written.

Yes our emotions put us in trouble when we think we are right and everyone else is not.

Emotions need to be carefully controlled don't they.
I, too, saw where it was headed, but enjoyed the ride. Where you got me was with it being a sister, not a brother.