The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/08
This is so full of depth. On one layer you told a story, down deeper lay the regret of the MC, and at the possible deepest level laid a message for all of us as we picture ourselves rocking in a chair at an older age pondering what might have been if we had only acted differently now. What a way to take a topic and make it stick. Well done.
Regret is the casualty of spite and so final a punished course to be left with! Tragic! I took pause in my young years and considered the cost of possible regret and I'm blessed that I did. My own marriage turned around in such a miraculous way that I've not to had to see what might have been if...
02/22/08
Oh! So sad. You capture some good images and emotions here. My favorite line was the third one in the first verse with the ghosts of bygones-I can see that very clearly in my head. Nice job. ^_^
02/24/08
Excellent poem, right on topic, and so, so, sad.
02/24/08
This is sad and haunting. Your writing is beautiful and descriptive. I really like this.
I like how you brought this back to the rocking chair at the end. Nicely done.