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02/21/08
How tragic! My heart just stopped. Parents, PLEASE show your children you love them.
This is an extremely pathetic story....one that can be quite fruitful in these hard times!


O that this piece would bear many, many lessons grasped for treating the damaging behavior of broken families! Especially Christians.
02/22/08
This is so incredibly sad! I bet this took a lot to write. You made me feel sorry for the son and frustrated at the Dad for giving him everything but the love that he really, honestly needed. Your title hints at the ending-but this is pretty good. My only note is the sentence with the social worker was a tad bit long-otherwise, good stuff. ^_^
This is so incredibility sad. Very good job of showing emotions.
02/24/08
Very sad, and well-written. (Did you catch the typo in the first sentence?) I like the way that this unfolds in "scenes", almost like little snapshots of this guy's life. A nice touch.