The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 666 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
02/21/08
I absolutely love this story. You definitely have the ability to put a reader at the scene!!!! I'm not sure I saw a tie-in to the topic, but it could just be me. Also, double spacing your paragraphs would make this great story much easier to read. Very good writing. :)
02/23/08
Charmingly rustic, a fun read.

I was surprised to see that Abner was just a boy, several paragraphs down--I'd thought he was an adult. Perhaps establish that a bit sooner?

Your last line was excellent, and so true.