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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Don't Cut off Your Nose to Spite Your Face" (without using the actual phrase or litera (02/14/08)

TITLE: Lethal Return
By Holly Westefeld
02/16/08


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Lethal Return

I entertain injustice in my mind;
Your thoughtless deed a thorn that pricks my pride.
A tiny trickle oozes from the wound,
And seeps inside, a seedling in my heart.

A bitter root I harbor in my heart;
Your act of cruelty, a gouging knife.
An angry geyser bursts and overflows,
And nourishes the oak, to form by will.

I calculate revenge with cunning will;
Precision tools of hatred hone the wood.
A glacier numbs my conscience; loathing blinds.
My razor-edged reprisal rests in hand.

I weigh the wooden weapon in my hand;
Your just and deadly punishment I wield.
It slips, and slices skin, my eyes grow wide.
I dare not e'er release the boomerang.

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""In your anger do not sin": Do not let the sun go down while you are still angry, and do not give the devil a foothold. ... And do not grieve the Holy Spirit of God, with whom you were sealed for the day of redemption. Get rid of all bitterness, rage and anger, brawling and slander, along with every form of malice. Be kind and compassionate to one another, forgiving each other, just as in Christ God forgave you." Eph. 4:26-7, 30-2 NIV

"but each one is tempted when, by his own evil desire, he is dragged away and enticed. Then, after desire has conceived, it gives birth to sin; and sin, when it is full-grown, gives birth to death." James 1:14-5 NIV




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LauraLee Shaw02/21/08
This paints a very powerful picture of the topic. And your ending is marvelous. This line was my favorite, though:
My razor-edged reprisal rests in hand.
Jan Ackerson 02/23/08
Oh, WOW! No, seriously--oh WOW!! This is beyond outstanding--I just don't have the words for it. WOW!
Beth LaBuff 02/23/08
Absolutely beautiful...your word choices are flawless. I love this phrase, "Precision tools of hatred hone the wood".
Joy Faire Stewart02/27/08
This is beautifully written. I especially enjoyed the first stanza. Outstanding writing on topic.
Shirley McClay 02/27/08
Wow.. I am not a poem person, but.. wow. The boomerang thing... At first read I understood the the MC actually made a weapon.. the boomerang. But after a couple more reads, either you are truly masterful and are refering to the hatred at a two fold weapon that will destroy both of them or, even more amazing, you mean it both ways.
Sara Harricharan 02/27/08
Very, very creative! There is a lot here that seems to hang in mid-air with the air of suspense as the rest of the story comes together. I think you did well here. ^_^
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/27/08
I am a poetry person, and I liked it very much--creative and right on topic.
Lyn Churchyard02/27/08
I am not a big fan of poetry, but this really grabbed me. The thought processes of the person 'speaking' and the word pictures were amazing. I loved the last line "I dare not e'er release the boomerang.". Well done!
c clemons03/01/08
The poetry was very good, would have liked more, the scripture text used more word count than the actual poem. To me, that's a little cheating. You could have referenced the scripture with writing out the whole thing. Good work though.
anonstrikesagain anonstrikesagain03/12/08
Loved it Holly. The first two lines quickly draws the reader into sober focus, while the third line from the end beautifully opens up the eternal life and hope for believers.
Jan Ackerson 07/28/09
Holly, I'm going to feature this outstanding poem in the Front Page Showcase for the week of August 10. Look for it on the FaithWriters Home page--and congratulations!
Diana Dart 08/11/09
Fantastic - the imagery is just masterful. I was actually cringing as I read it... Well, well done.