The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/08
I'm afraid I would've been begging for coffee, too, or at least sipping some off the top when no one was looking. I'd skip the foam and go straight for the java juice, though. :)
02/21/08
Your title is pretty good and really fits your entry. I was drinking my coffee as I read this and was kind of feeling sorry for you (and would have shared if I could). :) I like your name for coffee "joe".
Fun story here, like the term ugly joe, I will remember that. Dialog while foreign to me sounded real. Thanks for the smiles.
02/23/08
I loved this--it definitely read as authentic, and this guy's voice is very appealing.

A few typos to clean up, and a space between paragraphs, please, for our eyes' sake.

I'd read more with this narrator...this one was great fun.