The Official Writing Challenge
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02/15/08
Aw...cute story. I remember my first double digit birthday (MANY years ago). :) I think kids would love to hear/read this story.

Your ending lesson was different than what I anticipated it would be after reading the girl's prayer in your opening paragraph. (after she promised to never sin again). But the lesson you mentioned is good.

Your story is creatively written. I loved all the "extra sprinkles" she was giving the fish and kept wondering what would happen when she gave more than four. :)
02/16/08
What a "fishy" story! Good lessons to be learned here!
Laury
02/17/08
Loved this too.. it surely was on topic. The pastor was very blunt and straightforward, but I say that as it fit as a good thing. Poor baby, but I did feel kind of sad for the poor overfed fish. I will NOT eat that donut this morning! THANKS for the extra conviction... !
02/22/08
Very creative - congrats on 10th in your level and 18th overall. Good stuff, my friend!