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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "It's No Use Crying over Spilt Milk" (without using the actual phrase or literal exampl (02/07/08)

TITLE: Super Pup!
By Laury Hubrich
02/13/08


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Dowser lay draped over his master, Joey. He enjoyed the rise and fall of his boy’s chest as he slept. Finally, he couldn’t wait anymore. He got into Joey’s face with his puppy breath, and gave it a good morning wash.

“Morning, little pup.” Joey flashed a half-grin and turned his head towards the window. “Snow!” He jumped off the bed and knocked Dowser to the floor. Joey quickly bundled up and trundled outside, slamming the door behind him. Poor Dowser was left looking out the window, whimpering like he’d lost his only friend.

He cuddled up to his mum by the fire. Soon he heard a sound and lazily opened one eye. Little sister Sally clomped down the steps in her snowboots and snowsuit. Very quietly, he backed away from his mum and followed Sally out the door. “Freedom!”

Once outside, he took a flying leap off the porch and landed with a soft thud in the newly fallen snow. “Ruff. Yipee, snow!” He heard his boy’s voice above the others and took off running. He managed to get right in the middle of a snowball war! He jumped up to catch a ball as it came hurtling past him, just because that’s what pups do. Whack – right in the face. Poor Dowser put his head down in shame and sniveled. Once again, his feelings were hurt. How could his very own boy throw a snowball at him? Dowser ambled off to nurse his grudge. He didn’t even look back to see if Joey was watching. “Serves him right if he worries about me. I’ll show him.”

Dowser stuck his nose in the air. “Mmmmm, I smell bunny.” He bounded up the hill and took off after the unsuspecting rabbit. Once he got to the top, he forgot what he was chasing. He stood, legs apart, his imaginary cape stirring in the breeze. “Woof! I’m king of the world,” he shouted to anyone who would listen. The birds stopped their chirping and the bunny stared at the silly mutt.

Dowser forgot he wasn’t Super Pup. He took a running leap to test his flying skills. His feet slid out from underneath him and he fell hard on his rump and before he could say, “Oooooh, owie.” he started to slide down the hill. He slid right past the pesky bunny that got him into this mess in the first place. Bunny gave him a tiny wave and then hopped off. “Watch out,” Dowser called. “Can’t stop! Help meeeeee!” he squealed.

Poor Dowser slid and slipped and tumbled and twisted down that hill. He thought he would never see the end of it until he did; wooomp – right into a pile of snow. He crawled out and gingerly picked up one paw at a time, inspecting for damage. Finding he wasn’t hurt, he started to shake and shiver.

He looked to the right and then to the left. He bent down and poked his head between his legs to see where he had been. Nothing looked familiar. He stood there, all alone. “My tummy’s growling.” Dowser sat on his cold hind end. Tears started to form and fell down his snout, creating long, spiky icicles where his whiskers should have been. “Should’na left mum. Betcha she’s worried about me. Dumb Boy. If he loved me, he’d come look for me. If I weren’t so cold I’d run away. Why did Sally have to let me out? Dumb girl.”

“Dowser!” The pup’s ears stood up. It was Boy. His tail started to thump. He pounded the ground so hard that snow sprayed up around him and started him to shivering all over again, only this time in anticipation.

“Dowser, here boy!”

Dowser forgot he was angry. Joey stood, his arms stretched out and Dowser soared through the air, his imaginary cape flapping in the breeze, and knocked them both to the ground. “Ruff, ruff. He loves me, Boy loves me.” He licked the snow off Boy’s face and Joey got another whiff of sweet puppy breath.

Joey stood up, brushed off the snow and picked up Dowser and held him close. “I’m sorry, Dows. Let’s go home.” Joey stuffed Dowser into his coat and walked him up the small hill that led right into his backyard. Dowser fell asleep, safe in his boy’s arms, dreaming happy puppy thoughts, “He loves me. He loves me. Woof. Boy loves me!”


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Jesus Puppy 02/14/08
Earns you the grand Puppy approval... ;-)

Well done. I love a good puppy story.
Holly Westefeld02/15/08
This was so much fun! Our pets are so patient and forgiving. (Or perhaps just forgetful?)
Joanne Sher 02/15/08
This story absolutely exudes energy and sweetness. I just love it. You certainly captured Dowser's personality, and the sweet relationship between a dog and his "boy."
Beth LaBuff 02/15/08
Aw...cute puppy antics. What a fun story! You've cleverly written this animal tale. This would be such an enjoyable story for every kid (big and little) who has ever loved an animal. Really nice work on this entry. And as we all know... "Every puppy needs a boy."
Yvonne Blake 02/17/08
Wouldn't it be great if people were as forgiving as a puppy?
Well written
LauraLee Shaw02/17/08
What a darling tale. My 7-year-old dog loving daughter was JUST asking me when I was going to write a story about a dog, and NOW I have one to read her. Can't wait. :)
Patty Wysong02/18/08
I love this Super Pup POV! You captured puppiness, and little boys, too. Great job!! Very enjoyable reading! I'm gonna pass this on to my kids! Hugs!!
Patty Wysong02/18/08
I just read this to my little boys (6 & 10--I think--LoL) and their response: giggles, 'Super cool!' and I got hugs--I'll pass them on to you.

This gets the Little Boys' Stamp of Approval. *grin*
Betty Castleberry02/18/08
How adorable is this? It begs to be illustrated. I loved it.
c clemons02/18/08
Makes a nice story to read to children.
LaNaye Perkins02/18/08
This is so cute, what a wonderful story to read to my grandbabies. I loved it!
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/18/08
I can just see the illustrations for this little children's book. I loved it.
Lyn Churchyard02/18/08
This was such a fun story Laury! I particularly loved “Oooooh, owie.” he started to slide down the hill. He slid right past the pesky bunny that got him into this mess in the first place. Bunny gave him a tiny wave and then hopped off.
I could actually see it happening. You have a real way with words girlfriend. I loved this. Grrrr WOOF!
Jan Ackerson 02/19/08
Very precious--dogs are wonderful, aren't they? So quick to forgive and forget.
Lynda Schultz 02/19/08
Cute story. I howled at this line and the picture it put in my mind: "Bunny gave him a tiny wave and then hopped off." Very good.
Debbie Wistrom02/20/08
Very visual and engaging. I enjoyed Dowser very much, great story, keep up the good words.
Pam Carlson-Hetland02/20/08
Ahhhh! I love a good puppy tale. This is so very well written, I smiled through the whole thing. Great job.
Sara Harricharan 02/20/08
This is so cute! I love reading this from Dowser's POV! It's just cute and fun at the same time. I think it's a great children's story! Nice job with the ending and I espcially liked the last line with "Boy loves me" That summed up the whole feeling of this piece! ^_^
Peter Stone02/20/08
Such an enchanting tale told from the puppy's perspective. And true to life--puppy's get over a hurt pride really quickly.
Sally Hanan02/21/08
Aw. This was really cute, and I loved the bit with his cape flowing from his neck.
Henry Clemmons02/21/08
A yelping success. I love dogs and your entry struck a chord with me. Your compassion shines through regardless of your style. You are a blessing. Thanks for sharing this.
Shirley McClay 02/21/08
Awesome Laury! I missed reading this story and I'm so glad it was yours. I want to read more of your puppy stories! I would buy this from he bookstore for my boys. It makes me wish all over again that we could get pets for our kids!
Kristen Hester 02/23/08
In my mind I picture a darling beagle puppy when I read this. Precious! And who better to illustrate "don't cry over spilled milk" than a puppy? Excellent story and such fun. My daughter and I really enjoyed it. Thanks!
Joshua Janoski02/25/08
I'm so glad I went back through the entries that I didn't have a chance to read. Otherwise I would have never found this wonderful gem. You have to get this one illustrated and made into a children's book. My niece would love it! :)
Amy Michelle Wiley 03/02/08
Haha, fun story!


   
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