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02/14/08
Your story is very heart-warming. I think we all could really identify with Anne, in wishing we'd acted differently in certain situations. Your ending is very nice and your title is a great reminder! Very nice writing.
02/15/08
Anne was SO me when I was a teen. Your characterization is very good - and a wonderful lesson.
02/16/08
Wow! This brought tears to my eyes. Good writing!
Laury
02/18/08
You captured the characters' thoughts well.
You captured some typical, yet not-so-pleasant teenage attitudes in your well-crafted dialogue. Touching story.
02/18/08
So many times we regret the words we say in anger, frustration, or out of just plain selfihness. You illustrated the topic very well in this story! I love your characters and the honest dialogue between mom and daughter. Very touching and heart-warming.
Regret can be good, if it pushes us forward and not backwards. Well done Rita! This is writing at its best. Bravo!
02/19/08
A lovely story. Touching and well written.
02/19/08
Your story truly warmed my heart and ministered to my spirit. I guess I needed to hear a piece that was "true, lovely, good and praiseworthy." Thank you for sharing this.
02/19/08
I've felt exactly the same way--it's been a LONG time since I was a teenager, but I was very much like your character, at times. This was one that I needed to read.
02/19/08
That really touched a chord in me--from both ends--the teen and the mom. Great reminder to cherish the good...thank you! Hugs!
02/19/08
Lovely story. An excellent reminder to cherish the moment just in case there isn't another one.
02/20/08
Your title hints and gently reminds us that we should always remember to cherish the good. I needed this. Thanks for writing such a beautiful piece. You've made my day! ^_^
The earphones, the eye rolling, the "whatever" were so in-character that I felt like I knew your teen. Your development of her character was excellent. And when the Mom's smile had the sparkle again, I thought that was a wonderful conclusion to your sweet story.