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02/14/08
Your title started this hilarious piece and the eff-you-en (FUN) never stopped. Great work on this. NOW I KNOW HOW TO SPELL QUEUE! LOL I loved your paragraph about "AITCH!". I'm glad I wasn't drinking anything when I got to the "cocoa in--cocoa out" part cause my keyboard would have gotten sprayed. :) And what a good idea -- not crying over spilled vegetable soup, just play scrabble instead. :)
02/16/08
Very creative:)
Laury
02/17/08
What a fun and creative idea. I love all the letter words. A little more attention to punctuation would help it to flow better. In my book, however, it still gets an 'aye!'
02/17/08
Ha...Ha...Ha..! I loved it! Even the names were letters, except poor John. You even got both varieties of "Z", zee and zed.
Very creative!
02/17/08
Wow, is this creative or what? I'll have to try this game with my kids, as long as they clean up the mess afterwards.

This line had me in stitches:
“Yep, oh, just found the pee, potty break, cocoa in and cocoa out, hold on for a minute, and keep Zed away.”

02/18/08
VERY cute and clever - this must have been fun to write.

The punctuation errors were a bit distracting, but it's easy enough to learn. Do you have a challenge buddy?

I really enjoyed this. Fun fun fun!
02/18/08
I really enjoyed this funny and creative take on the topic. It would have felt a little more complete to me if I knew what the relationships between the three of them are.

Red ink: Although you carefully separated your dialogue, I still had some difficulty keeping score on who was speaking, since there was a good deal of back and forth between times that a name was attached. I never did completely conclude who was ahead in the Scrabble match before lunch.
02/18/08
LOL very funny. I'd like to see them playing scrabble with "Alphabetti Spaghetti" Now THAT would be interesting.
I became a little confused with the dialogue in the second half, but managed to work it out with a second read. Well done. This was very unusual.
02/18/08
Definitely a Scrabble lover here!! (of course! LoL) I was able to follow the conversation as it bounced back and forth, but it felt a little disjointed, maybe because it felt a little forced--but that was probably just me. I absolutely loved how you spelled the letters out and the 'aitch'!! Cool.
02/19/08
I love Scrabble and word play, so this really appealed to me.

Quite a few missing commas, so it didn't flow quite as well as it could have, but I really enjoyed the pacing and jolliness in this cute story.
02/19/08
Makes me want to go find that package of dried alphabet pasta I have in the cupboard and FLING IT! What fun!
02/20/08
Clever little piece...I love the dialogue!
02/20/08
LOL! This is just too funny. They were playing with the soup-and even I got caught up into the whole knack of it! I loved how they were finding the words and your spelling of the letters...too funny! I think is a favorite of mine for this week! Awesome writing ^_^