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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "It's No Use Crying over Spilt Milk" (without using the actual phrase or literal exampl (02/07/08)

TITLE: The Bargain Shopping Diva
By Sharon Henderson
02/12/08


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Mary Beth popped out of bed the moment the alarm went off. This was the big day. All the stores would be open at six a.m. and the bargains would be the best of the year. She had her eye on a novelty purse that she had been wanting for a year. It was one hundred fifty dollars, but today she could get it for the bargain price of ninety dollars.

Normally, she would not buy anything that wasn’t at least half off but these purses rarely went on sale. She just had to get there and be one of the first people in line. They only had five at this price.

Driving to the store, she noticed how quiet the normally bustling streets were at four o’clock. Arriving two hours before the store opened should be early enough to guarantee that she would snatch this bargain of bargains.

‘Rats! Look at that line. What do these people do? Did they spend the night here?’ She parked the car and joined the line that wrapped around the store. ‘Well, surely they aren’t here to get the purse. The store does have great deals on electronics and most of these people look more like techies than fashion divas.’

The doors opened and the crowd rushed in. Mary Beth made a beeline for the accessories section. She could see the purse display, complete with … one purse. ‘What? They should have five! Hmmph. Maybe they have the rest behind the sales counter. Besides, one is all I need and I’m almost there. Oh yeah, it’s mine.’

Pushing her way past the mother with the stroller and the little old lady using a cane, she was almost to the display when she tripped on a small child having a hissy fit on the floor. ‘Who brings kids out this early in the morning?’

When she pulled herself up off the floor, she reached for the purse, but it wasn’t there. Frantically looking around she thought she must have just knocked it off the stand. ‘Where is that stinking purse?’ Then she saw it … on top of the stroller. The mother who had impeded her progress had somehow passed her up and snatched the one and only purse.

Mary Beth spotted a sales clerk. “Excuse me. Can you tell me where the other four purses like that one on the stroller are?”

“Isn’t that the most precious purse you’ve ever seen?”

“Yes.” She squinted her eyes and smirked. “That’s why I want to find – the – other – four – just – like – it.”

“Too bad.” The sales clerk flipped her head toward her raised left shoulder. “You won’t get them today. They were purchased with a credit card over the phone ten minutes before we opened. Someone the manager knows.”

“But I’ve got to have that purse. I’ve been watching for it to go on sale for a year!”

“Nothin’ you can do about it. They’re gone.”

Determined to get that purse and get it at a bargain, the diva headed home. The online auction site sometimes had novelty purses listed with a ‘get it now’ price.

“Okay. There you go. One purse at the ‘get it now’ price of … oh yeah, that’s what I’m talking about … save me another twenty bucks! The store can keep their ninety dollar purse. I’m getting this one for a meager seventy.”

Mary Beth clicked the button and entered her purchasing information. “What do you mean my credit card number is invalid?” She verified the number and corrected the transposition she’d entered. “Okay. Here we go. This purse is all mine. Finally.”

We are sorry. This item is no longer available. The current quantity is zero. Please check back later.

“NO!” Pounding her fist on the computer desk, she noticed that her husband had slipped into the room. “I need that purse.” She explained to him all she’d been through that morning.

“What are you going to do about it? It’s gone.”

Frustrated, she realized that what everyone said was true. She didn’t have the purse and there was no use getting upset. There was nothing she could do about it. What good would it do to get worked up over something that just wasn’t available?

In the kitchen, while washing the breakfast dishes, she mused “A novelty purse would be nice but you can’t get back what is already gone. Maybe I need to find a sale on new shoes instead…”


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Kristen Hester02/14/08
This is a great story and one many of us can relate too. You have some great decriptions here and I felt her tension as she rushed past the others to the counter. I felt the dissappointment when it was gone. And I KNOW what it feels like to loose something on Ebay. Great job. Thanks for putting me "there." Keep up the great work. (and I hope she finds some shoes)
Beth LaBuff 02/14/08
You really took me on this shopping excursion...I was hoping she would get the purse. Then I loved the transition to shoes (when the purse was no where to be bought). :) Good work writing this.
Debbie Wistrom02/15/08
Great delivery. You hit the topic right on too, I'd say. Keep up the good words.
Laury Hubrich 02/16/08
Cute story. Exactly why I don't like to shop! LOL!
Laury
LauraLee Shaw02/17/08
Cute story. Good example of the topic.
c clemons02/18/08
Ha, Ha, been there done that, loved the story and the true Diva she is went thru the proper cycle of anger, regret, solace, and on to the next conquest. Good job!!!
Lyn Churchyard02/19/08
Thank you for reminding me why I hate shopping so much!
Seriously, you did a great job here. Your descriptions were great and the MC's emotions just right.
Lynda Schultz 02/19/08
Can't keep a good shopper down—at least not for long. Great story.
Jan Ackerson 02/20/08
Man alive, I'd NEVER spend that much for a purse!

Cute story, I could feel her frustration!
Glynis Becker 02/20/08
What woman doesn't see herself in this? Great job!
Sara Harricharan 02/20/08
Oooh. I could feel for her. going to all that trouble and not getting such a good deal-a bargain shopping diva myself-I know what a pain it is to deal with resigned salesclerks and pesky qauntity boxes in the online shopping cart. You made this very realistic and I liked the end where she decided to check for shoes.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/20/08
Went shopping with your mc, and it didn't cost me a thing. I'm glad that she got over her frustration. Good take on the topic.