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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "It's No Use Crying over Spilt Milk" (without using the actual phrase or literal exampl (02/07/08)

TITLE: Lost in the Past
By Benjamin Graber
02/12/08


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Too often we live trapped in the regrets of the past. But Jesus has redeemed the past, and given us a hope and a future, that we can live in today…

Lost in the pages of time
Wandering in my regret;
Trapped in my thoughts of the past,
Trapped in the valley of fret…

Searching for light in the dark:
Hope in a past full of pain;
Walking in circles, I find
Horror in my own disdain…

Walled in by mountains of shame
All paths are funneling down,
Sorrows grow bigger each day
Focused on yesterday’s wounds…

~~~

Finding escape from the gorge
In the ascent from the past—
Christ has redeemed yesterday
Giving a map to the lost;

Life was not meant to be lived
Focused on pages gone by,
Sins have been drowned in God’s grace
Now he presents us the sky!

Fly in the blue of God’s plans,
Letting regrets fall away,
Live in the freedom from shame
Jesus has offered Today!


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Beth LaBuff 02/14/08
I love all your contrasts--Lost in the past/Jesus has offered today AND wandering-trapped in the valley of fret/Christ...giving a map to the lost.

I'm just wondering if maybe a more postitive title would be better (your title is very poetic, though). The second half of your poem is filled with hope. Or maybe a title that reflects both thoughts. Just a thought.

I really like this stanza. "Finding escape from the gorge In the ascent from the past— Christ has redeemed yesterday Giving a map to the lost;" Your poem is well thought out. Nice writing.


Holly Westefeld02/15/08
Your poem spoke well for itself. I don't believe you needed the exposition at the top, but as you obviosly did, perhaps the end would be a less distracting placement.
Laury Hubrich 02/16/08
This is a poem full of hope!
Laury
LauraLee Shaw02/17/08
Lovely, hope-filled rhyme.
c clemons02/18/08
Nice work, I enjoyed this poem very much, keep up the good work.