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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "It's No Use Crying over Spilt Milk" (without using the actual phrase or literal exampl (02/07/08)

TITLE: Farm Follies
By Holly Westefeld
02/12/08


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Farm Follies

Corrinne, the hen, when eggs had been
All gathered in, would brood and cluck,
But eggs or knife, she'd opt for life,
Then lay more eggs, and count her luck.

Colleen, the cow, is better now,
But once she was meticulous.
To weep a week, when sprang a leak,
Was utterly ridiculous.

Old Hal, the horse, had served, of course,
For many, many years, 'twas true,
But better work, than duty shirk,
And soon become a tube of glue.

The snip of shears, once brought to tears
Young Lily Lamb, so glossy black,
But woolen crops, beat mutton chops;
She's sheepish now, for fleece grows back.

The pampered pig, he danced a jig,
No eggs, no leaks, no work, no wool,
But bacon he quite soon will be,
And know, at last, he was the fool.

No pleasure take, when others make
So much of what, to you, seems small,
Or you, in turn, will surely learn
Of just how hard the prideful fall.




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LauraLee Shaw02/14/08
I love this rhyme SO MUCH!!!! What a creative and wonderful example of the topic. Well done. I'll definitely have to read it to my children as well. ;)
Beth LaBuff 02/14/08
This is absolutely great! You've packed so much fun, so many pictures and thoughts into this. I love this, "Colleen, the cow, is better now, But once she was meticulous. To weep a week, when sprang a leak, Was utterly ridiculous.",.. and then I got to the horse/tube of glue and the lamb/mutton chops. But your lesson using all of these with pride is perfect. Really nice work... I love it!
Rebecca O'Connor02/15/08
You had fun on this one. All of your fun and play made this a delightful read! Loved it!
Debbie Wistrom02/15/08
Very enjoyable, loved how you used utterly. Great message as well.
Laury Hubrich 02/16/08
This is very good! Awesome Saturday morning reading!
Laury
Seema Bagai 02/16/08
Cute take on the topic.
Sharlyn Guthrie02/17/08
This is too cute! Well-written, and lots of fun.
Yvonne Blake 02/17/08
A poem! Yes, each has his job to do. You did well with your rhythm and rhyme.
Well done.
Kristen Hester02/17/08
Very cute poem! Love the rhyming. My daughter and I both enjoyed it. (I read it twice!) Thanks for sharing this. I'm still smiling.
Tim Pickl02/18/08
You've hit a homerun here! I imagine this entry as an illustrated Christian children's book...and recorded as an audio book, complete with farm animal sounds! I really like this one. Really!
Leigh MacKelvey02/18/08
Let me tell you how much I enjoy a poem that has been crafted well and includes poetic tools and strategies! I see you know your poetry! Loved the internal rhyming ... so much more interesting to read than a poem with only end rhymes. Not only internal rhymes, but alliteration was included, which tells me you are interested in the sound of your poem, as well as the rhythm. Loved this!
Leigh MacKelvey02/18/08
Meant t o ask: Where are you in Jersey? I'm in south Jersey.
Shelley Ledfors 02/18/08
Fun, well done and a wonderful take on this subject! I enjoyed this.
LaNaye Perkins02/18/08
This was a fun read with a great message. Well done.
Glynis Becker 02/18/08
Fantastic! So fun, but even more, there is a depth of wisdom here too. Great job!
Dee Yoder 02/18/08
A joy to read. ( : Fun, witty, and filled with good advice (tucked in lovingly beneath the humor and the verse). I love it!
Lyn Churchyard02/19/08
Oh my, this made me chuckle. I loved the feel of the poem-it was so easy to read.
Fun take on the topic.
I'd only make one change if I'd written it. I'd have "To weep a week, when sprang a leak,
Was UDDERLY ridiculous."
Okay, sad I know.
This was just wonderful. Well done Holly!
Jan Ackerson 02/19/08
Wonderful! Delightful! Perfect!
Patty Wysong02/19/08
Too cute! and with a lesson tucked in! I love it!
Lynda Schultz 02/19/08
Super!
Celeste Ammirata02/21/08
Great job, Holly. What imagination and fun. I love the lesson, definitely on topic.