The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/08
This piece has a lot of personality - I feel like I got to know these folks.

I got a bit lost in the first paragraph - maybe I wasn't reading it right, but I couldn't follow, in particular, the last sentence.

This feels so real. Very nice.
02/16/08
I'm thinking that Alzheimer's is setting in and the husband walked into the kitchen in his birthday suit... Your writing is very heart-warming. This could almost be devotional in nature because your ending is sooo good.
02/16/08
Beth, that's what I was thinking too. This is such a nice piece. It could use some proofreading but otherwise, very good.
Laury