Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Four Ways For A Christian Writer To Win A Publishing Package HERE



The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "A Man is Known by the Company He Keeps" (without using the actual phrase). (01/31/08)

TITLE: Rebel Mine
By Larry Elliott
02/07/08


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

“I don’t care!” This wasn’t exactly true. He did care what his parents thought. But they were wrong this time.

“This guy, this leader of those… those gypsies…”

“They’re not gypsies, dad. They’re fun loving, caring people. Like a family.”

“A family? Oh, whatever. Just how much do you know about him, really?”

“All I need to. He’s smart and kind and he cares about people. He cares about me.”

“We care about you, your mother and me. Isn’t that worth something?”

“Sure but… you just don’t understand. You’re just too old fashioned.”

“I understand this- me, your grandfather your great-grandfather and your great-great-grandfather worked hard to build the family business so one day you could take over, make a good living for your family and pass it on to the next generation. What about that? Is that just so much chopped liver, now? And what about church? We tried to raise you right, taught you to honor and respect God. Are you just going to throw all that away, too?” His dad’s face was as red as his mother’s apron.

“Mom. Can you please…?” His mom just shrugged and busied herself around the kitchen.

“This guy has a bad reputation, son.”

“I’m sorry dad. I really am, but I’m going to hang out with my new friends now.”

“You watch. This will all blow over in no time. It’s just another adolescent fad. Who in their right mind would want to be seen with some nobody from Nowhereville Nazareth. Everywhere he goes he insights a riot. Trouble follows on his heels. Why, just last week he trashed a church for goodness sake. I mean just who does this guy think he is anyway?”

“Jesus. His name is Jesus. He says he is the son of God and I believe him.”

“Well, mark my words, six months from now no one will even remember his name. Then who can say I told you so? Huh?”

“I love you mom, dad. I’ll be back as soon as I can, but I don’t know just when that will be.”

“Here son, I packed you a lunch. It’s just a couple of fish sandwiches. In case you get hungry.”

“Thanks mom.” He hugged his mother and she kissed his cheek.

His father watched puffs of dust as they followed his namesake down the path.

“Bahh, kids these days.”


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
Accept Jesus as Your Lord and Savior Right Now - CLICK HERE
JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 455 times
Member Comments
Member Date
Jan Ackerson 02/08/08
Clever update, and thanks for the aha! moment.

FYI--"incites"

I like your title, too.
Sharlyn Guthrie02/09/08
I had a little trouble with the first line...seemed like I had missed something. After that the story developed well, and I love the ending.
Patty Wysong02/10/08
Definitely a modern twist to this. That's probably how we'd see things today if Jesus were to have come in our days.
Gregory Kane02/11/08
A very clever twist to the ending. I like it when a familiar story takes you by surprise.
I felt a bit uncomfortable with the reference to gypsies. Historically they didn’t originate as a nomadic people group until the 9th century. And given that Abraham, the esteemed father of Judaism, was himself a nomad, I’m sure that it would have worked as a pejorative in Jesus’ day.