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Wow, what a twist. I was holding my breath at the end to see what the man was going to say. Very cool ending. Right on topic.
I like this optomistic piece. We are not consigned to be a product of our circumstances.
I LOVE your ending - the twist was just right. Great characterization - you helped me truly "know" each character.
This neat story shows exactly what Jesus meant when he said "It is finished"
You show it is Jesus who broke the circle of children paying for parents' wrongs.

Very well stated indeed!
As if you are applauding and saying "Good job Lord.We thank Ýouou."
Bravo! It is a good piece.
This wonderful tale could have gone any direction, I was especially encouraged by his fine attitude, in spite of everything that was stacked against him. Keep upo the good words.
I'm glad that Bobby was able to break the cycle! I'm glad he had a church family to help him out with it too. That's tough to have a name following you-the ending was good, the bit of suspense where I suspected that someone really did know him, the twist there was right on! Great job! ^_^
Wonderfully spot-on for topic! You rounded out each character well, with such a short word limit. Great job! I think this whole story could be expanded to a book. Very encouraging! Blessings, Cheri
Julie, I'm going to feature this piece in the Front Page Showcase for the week of August 11. Look for it on the FW home page, and congratulations!
Julie, this is just awesome! I just love the ending. Congrats on the showcase!!!
Excellent tribute to family. Write another about how you then used your success to help your Mom!
I was carried right along with the Charade and absolutely love the ending.