The Official Writing Challenge
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02/09/08
Some wise words here, and a well-written story.

The teen's character seemed to change his "approach" fairly suddenly, at least in my opinion. His rebellion in the beginning sorta didn't "go with" his attitude in the end. Could just be me, though.

I enjoyed this read. Keep writing!
02/10/08
Good characters and dialogue. I suspect the quick turn-around in behavior has to do with that old word count thing. I felt I was reading something a slightly older teen might try to do. At first I thought the MC was around 15 or 16. The MC himself was very believable otherwise. You made me think of how parents should deal with something like this! I'm torn between "getting in there and tearing up the defiler's nest" (as a preacher once described a teen's bad friend choices), and letting the good up-bringing, as displayed in your story, catch up with the teen.