The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow. Powerful story on how little time we may have to find the answer to the longing within us. But I would have liked to be given a little more hope that that evening he found the answer and finally had a "real birthday". Well written!
05/31/05
This was a very believable scenario and held my attention throughout. Well written. Great title for the piece. Good job!
Blessings, Lynda
05/31/05
How many people have just such through-provoking questions lurking just under the surface? Your writing is so real and descriptive. You could envision both the scene and the inner man so clearly. Great job!
05/31/05
Almost too real, a well written story. Thank you for thinking outside of the box.
06/02/05
Well rounded character with believable thoughts and emotions. There is a glimmer of hope given, he knows something's missing. In my imagination I see him sinking a lot lower or flying a lot higher before he recognises who will fill the emptiness in his life.
06/06/05
A neat and well constructed story. While it was sad that the void was not filled, this piece spoke realistically about how many without Christ would feel... EMPTY! I very much enjoyed the genuineness of this piece! It would make a great opening for a home group discussion or a lead-in for a Bible study! Hats off on a job exceptionally done!!