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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “All that Glitters is Not Gold” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: Million Dollar Handshake
By Sheri Gordon
01/30/08


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“It’s a pleasure to meet you.” I slowly withdrew my hand from the firm clasp of the distinguished looking gentleman. My husband and I had just been introduced to multi-millionaire Albert Lewis – a relative of the groom.

I had heard stories of this unique man. A private plane, jetting him between three residences and two vacation homes. A working ranch. Yacht. Expensive cars. Trips to exotic locales. He had it all. And here we were, sharing a piece of wedding cake and idle conversation with this incredibly wealthy individual. This was a once-in-a-lifetime experience. Yet, I couldn’t shake the feeling that something was very wrong.

As we continued chatting, I was drawn to his charming mystique. He exuded an air of importance, and his self-assurance was alluring. I found myself captivated by his warm smile that spread to his sparkling eyes. He appeared to take a genuine interest in what we were saying, and he displayed great affection for those closest to him. From outward appearances, Albert Lewis was a complete gentleman, in every way.

Why, then, was I visibly shaking? Why did everything inside me scream, “Flee!”?

My husband marvels at my gift of discernment, and at this moment I knew that there was more to Albert Lewis than his immense wealth and engaging personality. I realized that his sparkling eyes might better be described as haunting. And his smile, at times, appeared more beguiling than warm. His face seemed vaguely familiar to me … but why?

I was fascinated to hear about his lifestyle, but noticed that he revealed nothing about what he did for a living. I remembered hearing something about him being a doctor, but I assumed, by his age, that he was probably retired. He must have been a world renowned brain surgeon or heart doctor, I surmised, to make that kind of money.

Later, alone with my husband, I broached the subject of Dr? Albert Lewis.

“Honey, did something seem not quite right about Mr. Lewis?”

“What do you mean? I thought he was a nice guy. Are you making up weird stories again?” Although my husband believes I have the gift of discernment, he sometimes thinks I look for something to be wrong when the situation is completely innocent.

“I can’t put my finger on it, but I know, without a doubt, that there is more to this man. Something sinister, or evil. I have to find out what it is.”

The following day, alone at the computer, I googled “Albert Lewis,” and then decided to add “Dr.” to narrow my search. Over 100 hits. I spent the next three hours reading every site about the mysterious rich man from the wedding. The question had been answered … I had, indeed, seen him before. On a video tape we use for training counselors at the pregnancy counseling center. Dr. Albert Lewis … live on camera, performing an abortion.

“Any luck deciphering the big mystery about filthy rich Albert Lewis?” my husband asked as he came to read over my shoulder.

I looked away from the horrific reality on the computer screen, and slowly held my right hand out in front of my face.

“I shook the hand of an abortionist.”

As a solitary tear slowly made its way down my cheek, my small, quivering hands were enveloped in my husband’s strong, sure grip. “No. An abortionist shook the hand of Christ.”


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LauraLee Shaw01/31/08
Ohhhh, wowwwww. This is just brilliant writing. I just thought I knew what the ending was going to be. Your last line is perfect.
Jill Usher02/01/08
Love is found in the last line - wonderful!
Karen Wilber 02/02/08
Your ending is great! I wondered all along what that doctor did as I read your MC's misgivings.
Joanne Sher 02/04/08
LOVE the last line - masterful. This was well-told. I enjoyed it.
Ken Ebright 02/04/08
I like you story. The caught my intrest. I assumed it would be about someone who lost money
Pat Guy 02/04/08
Wow! Not only did you nail the topic but you had the perfect ending! Wow!
Jan Ackerson 02/05/08
Your last three paragraphs were stunning...almost like time crawls to a stop for that moment of realization. Awesome.
Sara Harricharan 02/06/08
Your last line is powerful. I think you nailed the topic here. The reality is haunting, but it fits the character you've described, I'm glad that you ended it the way you did and brought the story full circle-especially with the last line. A favorite of mine this week! Great writing! ^_^
Holly Westefeld02/06/08
I loved the ending, too. A solid demonstration of why you are in masters.
I can't say that the doctor's specialty was a surprise, as that is a subject to which my antennae are rather atuned.
Joy Faire Stewart02/06/08
I was captivated by the story from the beginning and the end did not disappoint. Excellent writing!
Loren T. Lowery02/06/08
Indeed blessed with a gift of discernment. If more of us wouldn't just pause but for a moment to listen to that still, small voice within. I enjoyed this and the tenacity of the MC to follow up on her hunch and then the turn around at the end...the paradigm shift - great, thoughtful writing.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/06/08
This is a perfect gem of a story.
william price02/06/08
Spot on perfect. Great job. God bless.
Beckie Stewart02/06/08
Wow, that caught me off guard. Excellent story.
LauraLee Shaw02/07/08
Congratulations on your EC! I'm so excited that fabulous piece will be in print!
Dee Yoder 02/07/08
Wonderful story, Sheri! Congratulations on your EC!!!
Kristen Hester02/07/08
Wow. Wow. Triple wow. This is excellent. I'm sorry I just read it. The ending was PERFECT. Congrats on your EC. It is very WELL deserved. God bless.
Debbie Wistrom02/07/08
So glad this made it to EC, or might have missed it. So perfectly on topic and what a great ending. Keep up the good words.
Joy Faire Stewart02/07/08
Congratulation on your EC win. It is well deserved!
william price02/07/08
I'm glad this story was recognized. It was very, very good. Congrats on EC, Sheri!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sharon Henderson02/07/08
Wonderful. Powerful. Congratulations!
Peter Stone02/08/08
Congratulations on your EC placing.
Sara Harricharan 02/08/08
***Congratulations, Sheri!*** I'm so happy for ya! ^_^
Catrina Bradley 02/12/08
Great writing, and a fabulous last line. Congrats, Sheri!!
Betsy Markman09/09/08
Wow, what a great ending! Not that the rest of it wasn't good too, of course, but the ending was just an "'ooh'-out- loud" kind of ending. Well done!
Pamela Kliewer09/09/08
Wow... just read this for Jan's class. Excellent. What a perfect ending.