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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “All that Glitters is Not Gold” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: Flipper and Dipper and Shay
By Gerald Shuler
01/29/08


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There’s nothing to tell that hasn’t been told
In headlines you read every day
Of the prize that was found down deep in the ground
By Flipper and Dipper and Shay.

These three had a friendship few others shared,
Enduring when all others fail.
But the prize they found brought their friendship down
And landed them squarely in jail.

Flipper told Dipper and Dipper told Shay
Of a deal too good to be true.
Flipper had found a remote piece of ground
Once owned by the pirate La Rue.

With stars in their eyes they purchased the deed
And set out, adventurers three.
They agreed to share what treasure was there
By dividing it equally.

All three friends knew that the pirate La Rue
Hid his treasures from prying eyes.
What had been hidden? And what would be found?
And how would it then change their lives?

So each bought a shovel and each bought gloves
And each started digging a hole.
They dug and they dug and they dug some more
‘Til they finally reached there goal.

All three had hit something six feet below…
The treasure at last had been found.
Nobody knew what the treasure would be
‘Til they pulled the crate up from the ground.

They opened the box and were horrified
To see the grim contents inside.
Bones upon bones and more bones stacked on bones…
The crew of La Rue and his bride.

Where were the rubies? The diamonds? The Pearls?
Their hopes and their dreams fled away.
All that remained was some worthless old bones…
Poor Flipper and Dipper and Shay.

But that was their find, they’d split it three ways…
By friendship their honor was bound.
With care they put all the bones in three sacks
And the crate went back in the ground.

On the way home they met up with the man
Who had sold them the worthless land.
They showed what they’d found down deep in the ground
Then pummeled his head with their hand.

They shouldn’t have fought, that’s how they were caught…
Policemen were passing that way.
Full backup was called and handcuffs installed
On Flipper and Dipper and Shay.

They’re guiltless, they claim, so it seems such a shame
Their shovels stopped digging the ground.
They never knew that the pirate La Rue
Hid his stash just another foot down.


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Holly Westefeld02/01/08
This was a lot of fun, and I loved the twist of irony at the end.

I like the internal rhyme, and wish you had used it throughout.
There were a few meter inconsistencies, but they could not spoil the overall effect.
Marita Thelander 02/01/08
Very well done! Keeps me going all the way to the end. I like the pattern of rhythm and rhyme.
Joanne Sher 02/03/08
Clever, and great rhythm for this.Of course I loved the last line. Priceless!
Laury Hubrich 02/04/08
Love this story inside the poem! Fun!
Laury
Mary Hackett02/04/08
Oh, cute! I love these kinds of poems. Yours has a rollicking swing to it that is just plain fun :)
Leigh MacKelvey02/04/08
Great story poem! Way to rhyme!
Catrina Bradley 02/04/08
What a fun read! When the meter is on, this ditty just dances. I love the ironic twist at the end. Good work.
Jan Ackerson 02/04/08
Awesome! Loved the ending, loved, loved, loved it! Wonderful use of internal rhyme, too. A winner here? Maybe...
william price02/04/08
I'm not an expert in the mechanics of poetry, but I enjoyed your tale and thought it flowed pretty smoothly. Very entertaining. God bless.
Joy Faire Stewart02/04/08
Very entertaining poem and loved the last stanza!
Beckie Stewart02/05/08
I have no idea how to red ink poetry, but I thoroughly enjoyed your poem.
LauraLee Shaw02/05/08
I flipped and dipped and swayed to this one. Too clever!
Beth LaBuff 02/05/08
Wow...and kudos to Flipper, Dipper and Shay! This is great! What a fun story. I love the rhyme and meter. Good work!
K. J. Cash02/05/08
Congratulations! You have just almost written a double sestina and didn't even know what a feat you had accomplished. You have your verses broken down into quatrains, but they could easily be divided into six lines in a stanza. Sestinas usually tell a story and usually repeat certain parts of the story that appeared in the verse before(maybe changing it a little and maybe just restating).

Sestinas end in just three lines. You have thirteen verses. The first six would make one Sestina plus borrow three lines from another verse. Then you have a full six verses left plus three to finish off perfectly two Sestinas or one big double. That's fantastic!
Tim Pickl02/06/08
I can almost hear the song! This one could be in an illustrated Chidren's Book!
Sara Harricharan 02/06/08
Cute! A fun and nicely ryhming read, for some reason, it reminded me of veggie tales, I could see them digging a hole and getting surprised with bones instead of jewels, the end is a real kicker. Good job! ^_^
Hanne Moon 02/06/08
Wonderful poem! Really lighthearted and cute. I enjoyed this one very much.
Loren T. Lowery02/06/08
This is so clever and well-writen and the ending had me chuckling outloud. The rhyme had be thinking of the legend of Molly McGee. Definetly top-drawer material.
Karen Wilber 02/06/08
I'm still laughing. I love the rollicking meter of this "pirate-y" verse. This one begs to be read over and over again - out loud. Here's one I wish I'd written. ;-)
Betty Castleberry02/06/08
Five stars! Oh, I LOVE this. I see one teeny boo-boo:
‘Til they finally reached there goal.
Should be "their" goal. but that's really nit picky, I know.
This is just marvelous. I love rhyming poetry, and I love this one especially. The ending is perfection.

Sheri Gordon02/06/08
Love it. The meter was so sing-songy. This was a great read, and the ending was perfect.
Linda Watson Owen02/06/08
Oh! What a treat!! I'm a sucker for treasure stories and this one is at the top! So cute, whimsical, and even has that little sting at the end! If this doesn't win something I'll eat my pirate's hat! Great job!!
Karen Wilber 02/07/08
Congrats on your placing in Advanced and on the EC list. This was one of my favorites this week.
LauraLee Shaw02/08/08
Congratulations on 4th place in advanced and on your EC! :)
Rachel Something02/08/08
AWESOME!!! I enjoy your writing very much. Keep up the great work.
Jules St. Jermaine 10/22/13
That was a clever and fun read. Thanks!