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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “All that Glitters is Not Gold” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: Little Miss Drama's 'wOw'zer Wings
By LauraLee Shaw
01/29/08


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“I just hate my life, Molly!”

Six-year-old Jessica, the Moore family’s drama queen, often talked to her favorite doll when her life seemed to be falling apart—which was quite often.

“I’ll betcha’ Tinkerbell never had to clean her room. Her mom prob’ly let her just fly and sparkle her whole exciting life long!”

Jessica plopped Molly into her lap and tied a bonnet around her braided hair. “Let’s go out to the playhouse, Molly. We need some ‘WoW’ in our day.”

As Jessica made her way down the stairs with Molly clutched against her chest, she whispered, “Besides, we won’t have to listen to Cameron’s loud music out there. He’s going through a phase, you know.”

“Where ya’ goin,’ Sweetie pea?” Jessica’s mom asked.

“Molly and I are going to the playhouse for some ‘WoW.’ Maybe this time I’ll get my wings…”

Jessica skipped through the back door as her mom stared after her. Just the night before, they had a discussion about this special fairyland that Jessica had found inside her playhouse. Supposedly, she had found a secret door that led to a place where she could fly and be free to imagine all she wanted.

“What’s it like to fly?” Her mom had asked her.

Jessica’s eyes were as big as saucers as she explained. “Welllll, I haven’t actually flown yet, but I’ll be getting my wings any day now. And I’ll be free like a bird.”


Each time Jessica took Molly to visit her private dream world, the routine was the same. She would sit Molly down on her wooden rocker, pose the doll’s hands perfectly over her lap and ask her to watch intently as she opened the "Door of 'WoW,’" as she had named it.

Shimmery dust would whisp through the entryway, and two beautiful young fairies would dress Jessica in the loveliest of attire—full of sparkles and sequins—with shiny shoes to suit the outfit. They flaunted an extra pair of magical wings each time, but before Jessica could grab them, the fairies would fly away.

This particular day, though, as Molly sat faithfully to the side, the fairies greeted Jessica at the Door of ‘WoW’ carrying a colorful set of feathered wings.

“WooooooW, can you believe it, Molly? I’m getting my wings today. See how perfect they are? They’ll carry me wherever I wanna go. Up over the rooftops all the way to the fluffy clouds—with only the sound of the birds chirping their beautiful song.”

As the young fairies held the wings up in the air, Jessica stood in awe of their perfection. She spun around, thrust her arms out to the side, shut her eyes as tightly as she could-- and waited for the young fairies to put her new, free-flying arms on her.

The ground shook, and Molly fell off her rocker as a result of a thumping impact. The entire playhouse transformed into a forest with a sparkling stream flowing throughout. Jessica was soaring just above the stream and below the trees, shrieking shrills of sheer delight as she learned to fly. She hoped that Molly was comfortable enough resting in the tree upon which she had landed.

“Now, thiiiiiiiiis is the liiiiiiiiiife, Molly. Look at meeeeeeeeeee. I’m flyyyyyyinnng.”

Remembering her life-long dream of turning cartwheels on the clouds, Jessica decided to head in an upward direction. Suddenly, a loud crack and a splash echoed through the trees. Jessica’s 'wOw'zer wings had snapped right in two, which gave her a solid belly flop into the stream. Her arms flailing, Jessica shrilled, “Molly! I can’t swim!” In the next moment, her toes found the muddy bottom of the water as she waddled her way out onto solid ground.

“You call these things wings?” Her heavy feet sloshed back to Molly. “Thanks anyway, fairies, but you can keep ‘em. They’re worthless! I want to go home.”

Jessica opened her eyes, and she found Molly rocking in her chair looking quite content. “Oh, Molly, I’m so glad you’re alright. That flying thing wasn’t all it was cracked up to be, was it?”

Bursting through the door of familiarity to her house, Jessica sniffed out a huge platter of her mom's fried chicken.

“Hey, Sweetie Pea, I thought you might be hungry. You want a couple of wings like usual?”

Jessica brought her hands to her head and belted out, “Oh, n-n-no-no-NO, Mom. No wings. If it’s all the same to you, we’ll have the legs from now on, won’t we, Molly?”


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Author’s food for thought: Are there WINGS in your life?

“Those who cling to worthless idols forfeit the grace that could be theirs.” Jonah 2:8—(NIV)



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Tim Pickl01/31/08
The drama queen gets her wings clipped....and literally brought back to earth! A magical piece... I could see this in an illustrated book. Excellent!
Kristen Hester01/31/08
This 'Wow'zer' story thrilled my kids. My eight-year-old said "This is interesting. It's the best."

I could picture the story, the doll, the girl, the faires, the wings. Great descriptions. I loved the line whey she was flying. I felt like I was soaring with her.

I chuckled at the ending line, "I'll stick to legs..." LOL. It was all an entertaining children's story and then you added the author's note. This took the story to another level. Ouch. Great job.
Debbie Wistrom02/03/08
Loved it that at 6 she was able to learn a lesson, Very creative. Loved the scripture tie in too!
Joanne Sher 02/03/08
Delightful. Love the "magic" of this piece.
Karen Wilber 02/04/08
This is precious!
Laury Hubrich 02/04/08
I loved this story! It's your first children's story, huh? Don't stop now! I think Kristen's kids would like to read more (and us, too!) Great writing!
Laury
Joy Faire Stewart02/04/08
In Jessica, you have captured the voice of a child. You have a gift for writing childrens' stories.
Catrina Bradley 02/04/08
Oh, I was a child again, wishing for wings. Wonderful children's story! And of course, on topic. :) Cat
Beckie Stewart02/04/08
Enjoyed this delightful children's story, with imagination and a lesson.
Jan Ackerson 02/05/08
Excellent! I've got a soft spot for stories with little girls in them, and this one went right to that spot.
Rita Garcia02/05/08
I loved the way you enclosed a terrfic message in the brightest of wrappings and topped it with magical ribbons.
Gerald Shuler 02/06/08
Loved this entry. All I can say is WOW.
Julie Ruspoli02/06/08
How special. I love this.
Great message and I couldn't wait to read the ending and see what happened. Thanks for 'taking me away' for a bit.
Wonderful article.
Holly Westefeld02/06/08
This was a lot of fun. I liked how you wove the doll throughout, and, of course, the ending.
Sara Harricharan 02/06/08
You had some great elements in here! First off-I love fairies-and you certainly had me riveted in wanting to see what would happen next. It was cute to have Molly along for the adventure. The ending is so funny though, you made me laugh here-wings vs. legs. Great job with the door of wOw that was really neat! ^_^
Hanne Moon 02/06/08
Oh this is cute! Very enjoyable look through the window of imagination of a child. Great job!
Loren T. Lowery02/06/08
This was soooo good. A perfect child's tale, magically told in a voice that would please and be understood by any age child.
Personally, I wanted her magical fairies to be real, but there is this real world we must contend with, isn't there. Great job. Delilghtful writing.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/06/08
This delightful story would make a great drama presentation. You made us see the precious, precocious child very clearly. The humorous twist at the end was perfect.
william price02/06/08
Very impressive!!!!!
Loved it from the title to the end. I think you have a future in this business. Great, entertaining job. God bless.
Pat Guy 02/06/08
WoW! What a GREAT children's story! And I LOVED it! I soooo enjoyed reading this. Right on the money in every way.
Kristen Hester02/07/08
Congrats on Highly Commended. You go, girl!