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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of ďAll that Glitters is Not GoldĒ (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

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By Tim George
01/29/08


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I canít let this go on any longer. I canít sleep.

Why are you telling me this? I told you to get it over with a long time ago. No one should torture themselves in a loveless marriage. Youíre doing Mary as much a favor as yourself. Set her free man. Set the both of you free.

How I wish I had never looked that womanís way the second time. I donít know if itís her smile or the way she latches on to every word I say as though Iím someone special. Youíd think sheís talking to the CEO of the company rather than me.

Didnít you love the way her hair shone when she tossed it around? Kind of sparkled didnít it? Like it was made out of sunbeams.

But Maryís hair shines the same way.

Whenís the last time Mary flirted with you with just a flick of her head the way she does? Bet you Maryís voice doesnít flutter when she hears your voice on the phone.

Would you shut up and let me think. Maryís a good wife, a good mother, and a beautiful godly woman. I know she loves me and would do anything for me. Man how I wished I had never listened to you. I was so Ö content until you came along.

Hold the phone there buddy. I didnít ask to be here. I was minding my own business down in the mail room pointing out to John how much better off he would be with Tiffany. It was the gleam in your eye that called me here.

But I didnít encourage anything. Come to think of it, I was pretty much brain dead to what she was even doing.

Did I mention how her eyes sparkle when she looks at you Ö or how happy Dan is since he took off with whatís her name across town? I heard his children are doing much better in school now that they donít have to listen to Dan and his ex fight all the time.

But Mary and I donít fight. At least no more than any couple does. Most of the time weíre happy together. We enjoy each otherís company.

Oh brother. First you create me and now you argue with me. If you donít believe me, read a book, watch a couple of movies, listen to Dr. Phil. Theyíll all tell you the same thing. That Iím right.

Thatís not what he says.

Who?

You know the one who is always here. He said I needed to see her through his eyes. See myself too. He said I canít believe all the spin thatís thrown my way. Did you know that Danís daughter is sleeping around with a couple of college guys. Sheís only sixteen for goodness sake. And he said whatís her name is already stepping out on Dan.

I should have known youíve been listening to him again. He thinks he knows everything. Like he can see into the future are something. I guess the next thing heís going to tell you is that everythingís not what itís cracked up to be. I tell you, that guy is one big clichť.

Actually it was more like, I was a fool for listening to you and ignoring him.

Okay, Okay. Tell you what. Letís sleep on it for now. Thereís really no rush. Youíre satisfied with good old Mary and thatís great. We can talk about this some other time. Maybe while youíre on that business trip next week.

I donít think so. I didnít create you nor call you here. You came to me the same way you did to Dan but Iím not buying it. Matter of fact I donít know why Iím even having this conversation with you. Hit the road! Iím having a talk with the one who is always here. If youíve got any problems with that, take it up with him.
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Charles rolled over and gazed at Mary where she lay sleeping beside him. It had been a while since he realized how beautiful she really was. She looked like an angel laying there with the moonlight reflecting off her face. His face flushed with shame that he had even allowed such a thought to hover around him.

Nothing about life is perfect, but Charles knew their life was good. He placed his hand on Maryís shoulder and fell asleep Ö content.


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Joanne Sher 02/02/08
Loved the conversation - and your title sums it up completely. Creative for sure!
Karen Wilber 02/02/08
Awww. Beautiful ending. I like the format of this with the conversation going on. Well done.
Annie Wurth02/02/08
Had me worried but great ending! Really good writing! PTL 4 U!
Peter Stone02/04/08
"First you create me and now you argue with me." - This is very good - the Enemy delights in tricking people into thinking that he does not exist.