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01/31/08
Wow, what a freaky twist at the end. Well done. I love "Crystal"'s name...the "me me me, blah blah blah" part. Very creative.
01/31/08
So original! I, too, loved the blah, blah, blah and also all the "glittery" words. You made the man characeter completely symphathetic until the end and thus : Surprise!

Well Done!
01/31/08
Whoa, this one caught me by surprise. Crystal was obvious, but Samuel sure wasn't. Very good.
01/31/08
That really was a shock! This is creative, well writtten and captivating. Loved it!
02/02/08
What a twist! I definitely didn't see that coming. Very creative take on the topic, and very well-written.
02/02/08
Yeah, I wasn't expecting that last bit, lol. Great story and very entertaining. I think I know Crystal.
02/02/08
I love the originality in this piece. It's clever and well written, although I hate that the dog had to get kicked. Very well done.
02/03/08
Oh yeah, was not expecting the Samuel twist at all. Nicely done. Love that you used the name "Dr. Auric" - clever.
02/04/08
This is sci-fi at its best. And I loved the surprise ending.
Pat Guy  
02/04/08
Love the title. ;) And love everything about this entry.

Fantastic ending.
02/04/08
Wow! Love this little piece of Sci Fi! I can't even think of anything to say -- why, I think you've left me speechless! Wow!
Laury
02/04/08
Extremely creative, well written, masterfully delivered and the twist of all twists at the end, BUT what I loved most was the Dr.s name, Auric, and this is why I like your writing, nothing is wasted, not even a name of a supporting cast member. I know what auric means, but it is also Goldfingers, as you well know, first name in the Bond movie of the same name. I would have gave you an A plus just for that. God bless.
02/04/08
When it comes to the unique and unexpected, you reign, my friend!! What refreshing twists and turns in this one as well as in so many you write! It's always a treat to be swept along in your masterful stories, then to be rewarded again with your 'zingers' at the end!
02/04/08
Ooh, this starts out great and progressively gets better. A creatively written, perfectly on-topic, delight. Don't know why I didn't guess the ending (it must be your talented writing) but I was surprised. Awesome.
02/05/08
Absolutely brilliant! It's everything a story should be. It has foundation, follow through, surprise, intrigue, with a moral to boot.
02/05/08
A fabulous read! Creative from start to finish. The ending was sheer perfection!
02/05/08
There's that twist we all love :) What I love about your writing is it always leaves me thinking long after I've read.
02/06/08
Oh wow, GREAT story Jan! And I absolutely love the ending! You had me cracking up with your MC...she was something else!
02/06/08
A sci-fi story lifted right from the pages of our newspapers and magazines filled to overflowing about the gods of this world -- the celebs! Fascinating storyline with a 'twist kick' ending!
02/06/08
Ouch! Poor dog.
A clever double example of the topic.
02/06/08
Oh, I was completely caught up in the story and didn't see the end coming. Very entertaining and on topic.
02/06/08
"great,great,great,blahblahblah,great,great,great."

The only one that wouldn't love this is the dog.
02/06/08
Whoa! Skin deep indeed, I almost wish that I didn't know who those titles would fit so pefectly (myself, at times included) the 'aha' moment came at the end. Double twist! I liked it. Nice job! ^_^
02/06/08
Sci-fi? Not really-if we look at the people we are and the believers we sit next to in church every Sunday, we'll find all these masks and we don't even have to wear a device! What a clever way of bringing out the topic and making me think about my skin deep Christianity. Jan, you're a master writer!
02/06/08
So reminescent of Oscar Wilde's "The Portrait of Dorian Gray". Ditto to all the remarks so far and I can only add, thank-you for sharing your gift.
02/06/08
Knowing what a clever and creative writer you are, I kind of thought maybe Samuel had a piece of jewelry like the blond's, but you caught me perfectly with the final twist. It's a good thing he had his compassionizer on when he wrote his check. :-)
02/06/08
Another WOW Jan! And perhaps another Winner too!!

Wonderfully imaginative and perfectly written.
02/06/08
Ditto all the comments above, Jan. Loved the title, the story, and that marvelous twist at the end. Just excellent all the way through!
02/06/08
Great twist! They would have made a great pair. Very creative!
02/06/08
I came to your site just to thank you for commenting on my piece. What a kick-in-the-head I got! This piece is super. I want to put down a mat and soak up any crumbs you let fall. ;)
Thanks so much for "slumming" with us at Beginners. It's really appreciated.
03/12/08
Wow, one of my favorite articles of yours. I thought it was going to be one I wasn't captured by, and then boom....