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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “All that Glitters is Not Gold” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: Candy Land
By Beth Muehlhausen
01/28/08


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Candy Land

I held a quarter in my hand -
‘Twas lots of money for a lad!

Poised right before the candy case,
I stared with lust, forecasting taste.

One cent apiece, the price was right;
My eyes could hardly hold the sight!

What did this “candy land” afford?
Yum-yummy things, so much adored!

Ten bins o’erflowed with treats galore,
Teasing my hopes to rise and soar.

Each one held different sweets – oh my!
So much to choose, so much to buy!

I’d saved for months for this big spree,
And now could not contain my glee.

My feet, they danced with little hops,
While I considered lemon drops.

Balls of taffy glared like eyes,
With stares so bold, without disguise!

Caramel rolls, they looked so good …
Might I have some? Oh sure I could!

Which should I buy? ALL ten delights?
A few of each? Twenty-five bites?

Saliva pooled; my cold hands sweat.
I gulped, not knowing what to get!

Then suddenly, the clerk stood there;
Looked down at me with a sharp stare.

“So sonny boy, something to go?”
I stammered, tongue-tied: “I don’t know!”

“C’mon now son, I’m busy here.
Pick out your goods, and be quite clear!”

My feet stopped moving and stood firm –
They could no longer jump or squirm.

Instead, I pointed through the glass.
“Two each, please, sir” was what I gasped.

The total sum? T'would be t-w-e-n-t-y!
That seemed like lots – beyond plenty!

But then, a nickel would come back …
“Plus chocolate bar, in the same sack.”

I handed him my coin, all wet.
He chuckled to himself, “You bet!”

Relieved, my nerves I tried to calm –
Licked off my lips and wiped my palm.

He handed me those treasures dear –
I reached out fast and grabbed them near.

“Here ‘tis your loot – it weighs a ton!
Now make it last! Here you go, son!”

I smiled my thanks, clutching the sack -
Ran through the door and headed back.

Our house was not too far from there;
I’d soon be home, ready to share.

The sack, it swung from side to side;
My feet, they pounded out each stride.

But being one to seize the day,
Temptation struck without delay!

My chocolate bar – best of the best!
It surely put me to the test.

I looked inside and grabbed that treat,
Before it melted in the heat.

The paper wrapping came off fast,
Three bites, then gulp – it did not last!

Once started I could not ignore
My tastebuds’ scream for “More, more, more!”

Again I peeked at all my loot.
A sweet-tooth binge? Oh what a hoot!

Bon-bons were next – just two or three -
Then I sat down beneath a tree.

I stayed there long enough (and more),
Bolting the candy from the store.

Into my bag each wrapper fell,
As evidence - the truth to tell.

At last when all my goods were gone,
I got up and approached our lawn.

The house seemed not the place to go.
I felt quite sick - and mom would know!

The truth my stomachache would tell:
I ate too much! (Surely she’d yell.)

The barn seemed safe – a place to hide,
Where animals might take my side.

I rolled the door, stalked like a thief;
Inside the darkness spelled relief.

Holding my bag of wrappers tight,
I climbed way up and out of sight.

Atop the hay I lay down flat,
And said my prayers – feeling quite fat.

“I’m sorry, Lord, what did I do?
I’m bad and wrong - repentant, too.”

Error confessed - innards at war -
I lay real still with stomach sore.

“Keep me away from candy bins –
Oh please! This is the worst of sins!”

It seemed He knew – He heard my plea –
And set about to rescue me.

“Here is the way, if Me you trust -
Don’t LOOK, and then you cannot lust.”

I pledged never again to buy
Too many sweets - lured by my eye.

That day I hoped my Father’s hand
Would keep me out of “candy land.”


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Lynda Schultz 01/31/08
As I was reading, I was reminded that there is one more chocolate bar in the kitchen cupboard—I guess that means you did your job well. Too bad I am not going to take your advice (ha!) — gotta go get that bar! I didn't away get the rhyme pattern, but the sentiment sure came through.
Marita Vandertogt01/31/08
Wow - a whole short story in poem form... really well done. I enjoyed the read.
Laury Hubrich 01/31/08
Love this story set in a poem. It's not only little boys that can't stop at just one:)
Laury
Joanne Sher 02/01/08
LOVE this. So delightful in form, voice, and message.
Annie Wurth02/02/08
This is soooo great. I love it! PTL 4 U!
Kristen Hester02/04/08
Cute. I read this to my daughter who has a sweet tooth and she enjoyed it. Well written.
Linda Watson Owen02/04/08
Aha! Yes...Lord, keep us out of 'Candyland'! What a perfect ending to a delightfully written poem! Loved it!!