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01/31/08
This one reminds me of another saying: "The grass is always greener on the other side of the hill." You've captured the sense of bitter-sweet and responded to the theme well. Nicely done.
02/01/08
Wonderful atmosphere and sense of place. You captured the mood masterfully. Excellent.
02/02/08
This is a wonderful reflective piece. The tone is perfect for the message. Well done.
02/03/08
Lovely piece and wonderfully written.
02/03/08
So sad. Beautifully written.
Pat Guy  
02/04/08
Oh wow ... this is beautiful. I sooooo enjoyed this read. I lived every moment ... wow.
02/04/08
Ths story and your sense of timing are excellent. The story just keeps unfolding a little at a time like a treasure wrapped in layers of tissue paper.
02/05/08
Oh my, you've captured one little, melancholy moment just so perfectly!
02/05/08
I felt her regret, lost time, wrong decisions...beautiful writing.
02/05/08
This is lovely. I enjoyed every word and pictured the whole thing in my mind. Nice story. Excellent writing.
02/06/08
This is so sad! You made it very real for me with the sounds and the phrases like the broadway clips, etc. The promise ring was a good thing though, I liked how it showed things changing so when the ending came, it fit right in. Nice job. ^_^
02/06/08
I think you summed up perfectly what Elizabeth had missed.
"“But life is more than love, I know,” he said. With that, he’d kissed her on the forehead, and gently said, “Let me know when it becomes the other way around.”"
02/06/08
There was so much I enjoyed in this story...loved the 2nd paragraph. Also, the ring spoke volumes. Excellent writing!
02/06/08
This is superbly written story. It's too bad you mc did not see that the glitter of love was the lasting glitter.
02/06/08
This is beautiful. Your descriptions are so vivid, and you captured her emotions perfectly. Great job with the topic.