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I loved this story and the voice was so real for a little child. Yiur descriptions were wondeful and the story was told in such a matter of fact manner, it seemd very real.
Oh how sad. The child's point of view gave this a fresh tone. Nicely done.
01/31/08
Great take on the topic. Drugs are the perfect illustration that not all that glitters is gold. Tinfoil indeed.
01/31/08
Oh, I am crying like a baby! You will never have any idea how much this story reached in and grabbed my heart. So well-written, I felt like a fly on the wall. This one needs to get out to the public...
02/01/08
Amazingly powerful - I so ached for that girl. Excellent job of sharing an adult story from a child's eyes. Wow.
02/01/08
I often counsel addicts of all kind and the treasure they seek is never gold. It is only sorrow,brokenness and destruction. Thanks! Good job!
02/02/08
Brilliantly done and exactly how it is for too many children of addicts.
02/02/08
You did great with the voice of this story - it sounded just like a child would. And while it's sad, you offered hope at the end. Enjoyed this tremendously.
02/02/08
I'm so glad you included Bessie and gave us hope for the family. It makes me want to be someone's Bessie :-) Poor little tyke.
Loved the voice of this story. Thank God for Bessies. As I read this I kept thinking of the topic, "All that glitters is not gold.." That's the truth! Well told.
02/03/08
What a powerful story. Well done.
02/03/08
Great title for a powerful story. The child's POV really drew the reader in and the voice was perfectly done.
02/04/08
Well done with this story told from a child's perspective. What agony children of addicts have to go through both at seeing the parents degradation and their own heartache and suffering.
02/04/08
Your well-written story is a sad reality for many. Very creative work on this.
02/05/08
the innocent view through a child's eyes - very good!
02/05/08
Heartbreaking, devastating, and written in a perfect voice. You're definitely a master of wordsmanship!
Oh, this is so heartbreaking. Your descriptive writing pulls your reading into the scene. The title is perfect for the piece. Excellent job!
02/06/08
I like this! It's another favorite of mine this week. The darkness is there, but it doesn't overwhelm, the light and the hope and seeing this story through the eyes of a child make it something new, I enjoyed the read and especially the end, great writing! ^_^
You have broken my heart with your story, and that's what good writing does.
Thank you for the glimmer of hope. I was fully engaged throughout.
Only through the eyes of a child could this story be told in such a compelling heart rendering way. I loved the strength of the little girl and God bless Bessie!
Debbie, I'm back reading this for Jan's class on atmosphere. I know when I read it, I liked it (see comment above) and now that I understand more of what you were doing, I like it even more: ) Loren