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02/01/08
Delightful and fun. I think you have "dated" yourself (if this is who I think it is LOL). A very fun read.
I really like the message of this one - sometimes the dreams we think are "smaller" are actually where true happiness can be found, if they are part of God's perfect plans.
I would suggest that watch your rhymes; the line "That famous I would be" sounds unnatural, like it the rhyme was forced.
Keep up the good work!
Blessings,
Ben
What a fun poem! I think we all have high hopes like that. Then we kind of have to come to terms with reality and just thank God for what we have. I love how the words flowed so well together, though I must admit, I don't know who most of those people are! I guess I have some homework to do, lol. Great poem :)
I read this poem aloud and loved it! So true to life and right on topic. Excellent writing.
02/04/08
Cute poem of the vain imaginings of youth that we have all experienced.
02/05/08
Excellent! You're becoming one of my favorite FW poets.
02/05/08
Your title is perfect. I love the little girl dreams. I think we (girls) can all relate to this. I played "Five Foot Two" on the organ growing up. :) Very nice work on this.
02/05/08
Thank you for this - especially the last stanza. I could relate to the little girl dreams and now I entertain my kids.
Oh, dear friend! This is so precious in every way! What a delightful poem with just the right mix of wit, fun, and profundity! You write in such an appealing and engaging way! Like all of your admirers, I love your style too. You're a pro!
02/06/08
Love this poem. I remember "skating" around my living room with the Olympics. And then we grow up! Great job!
Laury
Great work with a story-telling poem. Kudos!
I'm smiling at the simple perfection of this poem. Your work continues to amaze and inspire me.
02/06/08
Aww! This reminds me of wanting to 'be' those very same people! Right now I'm probably rooting for the 'big cause'. ^_^ You're really, really good at this, Verna! Another lovely piece! ^_^
In my book, being
"A wife, a mother, teacher, too,"
Is a great and noble cause, always worthy of applause.
02/06/08
Beautiful, Verna. So simple, and so true. The voice and meter were perfect. Excellent example of this topic.
02/06/08
Linda, my dear Linda...What a poet you are. I've been learning a little here and there about the mechanics of the art, and from what I can tell, this was spot on perfect, besides meaningful and WORTH the time. Excellente! God bless.
02/06/08
Of course I meant. Verna, my Dear Verna... (:
I'm gettin' old sister, way old. Forgive me (:
God bless.
02/06/08
You nailed it with this one Verna! It's so perfect! Topic/story in rhyme/intertaining - all of it. Loved it Verna.