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Very good story—kept me on the edge of my seat.
Whew, that was close! I'm so glad that the worst did not come to pass.
I thought an error on Simon's part was coming, but I like this ending better than the one I had imagined. Lovely writing, lovely ending. Enjoyed reading this very much.
Whew! I was really hoping this would turn out OK. I like the way you ended it - gently, with a good lesson.
Yikes--this one scared me, a little. And I learned a new word: "tincture." A lovely illustration not only of the proverb but of grace.
You have some beautiful descriptions, as always. There's always a sense of peace that envelops me when I read your work :)
Touching. And a great reminder that GRACE covers us when we fall flat on our faces.
It was fascinating to read of all the herbs, some familiar some not. Your story is wonderful and a perfect illustration of the topic.
A nice story and great illustration of the topic.

I couldn't place the character's names somehow. They didn't seem quite right if they were meant to be English Medieval.

I noticed some good research with the herbs. Foxglove ( Digitalis pupurea ) is the source of the heart drug Diglin and would grow in an apothecary’s garden. Laurel ( Prunus laurocerasus ) contains cyanide and is also very poisonous. I wouldn't make it into tea or eat the cherry like fruits!
Lovely story. And I loved the presence of God watching over and protecting the characters.
This story reminds me of the scene from "It's a Wonderful Life" where the grieving druggist nearly sends the wrong medicine to a child. Good illustration of the topic and I always enjoy the historical settings and characters you create.
Oh I so liked this! I wanted the story to go on and on to see what happened next! This is one of my favorite kinds of stories. Excellent writing-especially with the dialouge and the descriptions of Simon helping with the chores and the ending was just right. ^_^
Excellent voice and beautiful language in this piece.
This ending reminded me of "It's a Wonderful Life" a bit and how a mistake was prevented and a life saved because of George Bailey. Glad the boy did not drink it and the young apprentice learned a valuable lesson without taking a life!! This was well written indeed.