The Official Writing Challenge
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01/25/08
Very realistic and written with a fun, wry voice.

The phrases that indicate the passing of time, like "One week later-" could easily be tacked onto the next sentence for a smoother flow.

I like the way you gave it an unexpected twist at the beginning by having her first try actually turn out well.

01/30/08
Great job illustrating the topic. Liked the little twist at the end. ;)
01/30/08
You're so good with dialogue that it makes your stories flow very naturally. This story is a great take on the topic, too. Another nice entry, Ann!
What a cute story! I like the fact that she grew up to be a hairstylist, also that her friend still trusted her.
01/30/08
I loved the teenage "barber" to professional hair styliest progression. I could picture this (and wondering if it actually happened this way :) ). Your title is clever and perfect!
01/30/08
Such a fun read! Perfectly on-topic, great dialog. Loved the ending - especially the last line. Great job!