The Official Writing Challenge
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01/24/08
He had it made indeed. I like the short ending piece where Russ is repeating the earlier thoughts that had gone through his friend's head. That was a good glimpse of him. I think there was a typo, it was supposed to be "A childhood friend" the "a" is missing? Could just be me. This was interesting to read. ^_^
I enjoyed this story. Good reminder that slow and steady often does win the race, but I might have had trouble staying on track if I'd inherited a chunk of cash too. This would be a good story for high school kids to read, not that they'd listen but you never know. Anyway, good job illustrating the topic.
I really like how you repeated the thoughts (with the twist) from the beginning. Great message. Keep it up.
01/28/08
Great job of contrasting the two fellows. This is a good story--and in reference to the conversation we had at the restaurant, it's not "sweet" at all! You're branching out! Well written.
01/28/08
Good job illustrating the contrast of the topic with Aubrey and Russ. You hit it from both sides...
01/30/08
Great story of contrasts. Enjoyable read.
01/30/08
Good characterizations and I also like the contrasts between the two friends. You are spot on with the topic, too.